Well shit, I'm at the end of the wonderful road and I've gotten hooked on Ayane and Alex's playful bantering so bad now. I thought Alex should have been in the middle, but no problem, haha. It was sweet that she called him and he rescued & carried her home on his back. I love Ayane so much.

Maybe too much now that I'm wondering if she'd be a better fit for Alex, but as long as it's one of the sisters, I'll be happy. His first time just cannot, cannot! Be with Nanako! Haha, she's a well created OC, but a big antagonist for me with my goal-reading

C'mon, Ayane. Trophies are saved onto your PSN account. Just get a hold of a new PS3 some day (or PS4, with all of that ninja stealth you could probably steal one easily) and log right back in. Bada-boom!

The "boobies" thing was hilarious; I love Ayane. I'm glad you made her come out of her genocidal shell and move in with Alex and Kasumi. Family should stick together. I like the little quips between her and Alex; I hope it grows to be more of a running gag. So cute. Maybe she's jealous of Kasumi because of Alex? It would be very interesting dare I say.

Just read the end of the chapter. SO CUUUUTE! One left... I'm gonna cry

Damn it, Hitomi! Kiss-Blocked! Glad Alex finally knows that Kasumi and Ryu aren't together. Wish they would kiss again though so I could melt into my bed.

Ah, I love Ayane x Kasumi, that's how I stumbled across this story actually, looking for that pairing and found this instead :D

Glad that Hitomi made an appearence! A Nanako-free chapter... at least from what I can remember; this is the review I lost and somehow it loaded back up when I came back to this chapter. Anyway, that's good, I like to focus more on the two main characters than anyone else. Here's hoping for Chapter 26 in the future as I come close to finishing what's here now

I dunno, I think this chapter felt kind of empty.

I wish Alex would man up a little. He's getting too whiny now. Well, he's been too whiny, but now it's really getting on my nerves. I can't relate to him very much at all, but he seems like a good person nonetheless.

I loved big sister Mayu kicking Nanako to the curb and Elsa bonding with Kasumi :DDD

Oh my gosh Ayane you are the V.I.P of this story now. This chapter was so sweet!

Except the minor oral sex scene. I thought Alex should have had all of his, uh... "Virtues" intact for Kasumi. Oh well, I would have caved a long time ago if I were him, but I still wish Kasumi had beaten Nanako to the... fellatio. That's awkward to say.

I REALLY hope Kasumi never finds out about it...

She kissed him! They FINALLY kissed! Yesss! I'm so happy about that.

I'm liking Nanako a lot, in a way. If this wasn't a DOA fic, she'd be my main girl, but she keeps getting in the way of Kasumi and more importantly my favorite pairing I've ever read about in months, so that kind of puts her on my shit list lol. I know it's just a story, but I really get into it. Glad to see Ayane apparently being nice to her sister for once (or nice in general) unless that changes in the next chapter, haha

lol, I caught that DOA Xtreme reference!

Also NOOOO, FUCK! Just, toss Nanako in the beach or something, oh my gosh I can't believe this. I'm into the story so much but now I'm going to bed sad because I'm shipping Kasumi and Alex so bad here and I can't continue reading until tomorrow. I'm just hoping it wont take you long to finish this story though. It's been close to thirteen years!

Wow, his big sis has him whipped, lol. Wasn't he taking Kasumi with him to the family meeting? Don't tell me he changed his mind and decided to take Nanako instead...

The end was so cute from this chapter. Nanako keeps making me think she's the dumbest woman ever, screwing around with her little diary on a computer that she didn't password protect and leave her apartment with Daisuke in it. She's asking for trouble to stir up. If it weren't for Kasumi then everything would turn to shit for them.

Sorry, I've grown to Alex a lot, and I already love Kasumi. It would be cool if it was a twist and it was Ayane who beat up Daisuke's friends. Anyway, Nanako keeps pissing me off. She's so stupid. I keep wishing she'd just be written off and for rom-com hygencs to happen between Kasumi and Alex

You said she was on her parent's bed, but who would Kasumi have been talking to on the phone? I almost thought it was a Kasumi clone for a second

This is amazing. I feel sorry for these characters, these OCs, which is something very rare for me. You write so well, you're making a DOA story and I'm hardly interested in any of the actual DOA characters. It's mostly all about Alex and I'm loving it. I'm loving Kasumi caring for him, I'm loving Alex's personality, and I'm loving how you portray Nanako as not your stereotypical romance antagonist.

A and I haven't even finished it yet! How did you manage to stick with this for over 10 years? Just incredible.

I thought it was great.

I don't know if you've heard reviews like this before or not since this story is 12 years old, but this chapter is incredible because it pulls me in and gets me interested and caring about the characters like your OC's, which is normally pretty hard, at least for me. The writing and grammar is fine and the story has me very interested. The fact that you haven't gave up on this for 11 years is remarkable! I hope to continue reading to the end. :D - Crow