Well what can I, D.S.A. say about this fic. Hmm...

Okay honestly I really enjoyed it, the story was well written, characters very well done. Especially the sprite, man I absolutely loved the protrayal of that particular character. If I was playing the game right now it would feel like that between them.

Now as far as critique ... you have a few places where the story flow seems rather chopped together and has many pauses. The most significant is within you're opening paragraph. That particular one felt pieced together with out any real cohession. I saw what you tried to do with it, however it just didn't turn out quite right.

However, outside of that I did enjoy it and hope that you write more. I give you my seal of approval.

LMAO...that was so heart-wrenching until the end, but the way you wrapped it all up was great.:D I especially like the Sprite's words of wisdom to the Girl...never underestimate a person's wisdom.;) And of course, Randi's last comment to the Sprite's spirit was great...I can almost picture him hauling butt out of their room while laughing uproariously.

Excellent job, I'll have to check out a few of your other fics...;)

First, please don't take my Caps-lock rantings seriously. I let my emotions get the best of me.

Second, congratulations on a fic well done! I enjoyed it quite thorougly. Yay for sappyness!

Keep up the good work! I'll look for your fics in the future.

-Aaron

HUZZAH! Happy Endings abound!

I feel so relieved.

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AH! How COULD you! Dammit, dammit, DAMMIT!

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I'm frustrated now.

I YELL AT YOU!

YOU BETTER HAVE A HAPPY ENDING OR I WILL CURSE YOU WITH ALL THINGS UNPLEASANT!

But seriously, I am thoroughly enjoing this fic thus far. I can't wait to get to the end.

-Aaron

Oh Jackie that was beautiful. I could have cried, I should've cried. But some of the endings on the earlier parts had me a little worried... I'll kill you if you do that again.

I usually don't review, but...Damn! This is, without a doubt, the best SOM fanfic I have ever read. Sure, maybe it was a bit sappy, but you pulled it off in totally un-cliche manner. I mean, your storytelling flows so smoothly. I've noticed that you haven't updated/written much recently, but please do! I'd love to see more of your work!

Hehe, Popoie the secret spy!

Thank you so much for updating your story. :3 I'm happy now. That story was simply amazing and I liked it very much. It always had me coming back, looking for more . You write wonderfully. It's so clear and flowing. Not choppy at all. Thanks for writing this! (_/)

Oh and Dilandau... you KNOW it left you with a warm, content, fuzzy feeling, don't deny it. ;3

Bye, bye! I hope you update your other story too _.

THANK YOU! I am so glad you finished it off the way you did. :)

Yay! Nicely done! I loved it!

I LOVE this story! LOVE IT! LOVE IT! LOVE IT! Gah! I think this is the only story on that I have read that has been finished... well, it's definetly the only finished SoM story I've read so far! Oh man, I almost cried the last time I read it and Randi "died." But you fixed it, yay! OK, well get a crackin' on your other humor story, too. Haven't seen an update on that in who knows how long. I'm writing an SoM story myself, I haven't posted it yet though because I like to have people in my creative writing class critique it. OK, well good work, me likes happy endings! :)

What a bloody great story this was! Thats all I can say; words cant convey how good this is.

OMG... I KNOW you didnt' pull that. I know you didn't... I've been checking back every three days or so since the last chapter and you give me this? ;_; Please tell me it's not over.

Dang. I've barely played SoM but reading your fic REALLY makes me wanna rush out, right now... especially like the end of this chapter. Some parts of your fic were a bit rough, but, all in all, good job for resisting some of the more campy cliches. Woo!