Holy shit. The first one was hot but this was just fucking perfect.

i love EVERYTHING about this story, except that it ended XD
i especially love how brutally realistic and emotionally unattached vegeta is. in my mind, this is how saiyans work. 'soft' emotions are a completely human thing.
good job portraying both! hope to read more about these two

Good story!

I noticed at the end you referred to the Time Chamber as "this empty hellhole," or at least made Trunks refer to it as that. Do you have a resentment, some sort of deep hatred for the Hyperbolic Time Chamber by any chance? It is not a hellhole, yet you have made it seem like a terrible place by calling it such a profane thing.

Dude...wow...just...wow. This was...wow... I...wow...wow wow wow. This lemon...wow...the interaction...wow...the strong described detail of emotions...wow...just...fucking wow.

...Eh-hem. I seem to remember having read this story, and its counterpart, some years ago, and I have to say, I enjoyed it just as much, if not more so, this time around. Your portrayal of emotion is stunning. Yes, the sex is nice, but what strikes me most about this piece is the emotions. I feel like I'm drowning in them. What you have is a very rare gift to craft words into choking emotions that reach out and throttle your reader; it's a gift I don't often find, even amongst published authors.

So, sincerest congratulations on a job well done.

This is the most spectacular thing I've ever read. Seriously.

I'm sad you haven't written anything else in a couple of years,

but if you get this, please know that your stories are still appreciated.

I love this story. The end

Awesome, your writing is just as intense as the moment would intentionally be, keep writing, and if you would like read and review mine! don't be a stanger and visit my profile sometime, I would like to hear from you.

Little Washu!

Another good one.

;]

U were right to read the other story first. great job!

Loved it, you got this down. I'm impressed on your skills, I don't even have half. A gift it is.

very well written