Your story is about to end :( I just hope you wouldn't abandon this one, since I read at the bottom of your story that maybe you would abandon this story (which I hope not) anyways, when are you going to update? It's been five months since you've updated. Hope you update soon since I can't wait to find out what will happen.

I love ToshiSaku

Toshiro!

I can't wait for the next 3 chapters

Okay, okay. Hello there!

Uhm, where should I begin? Err, right. First, I'd like you to know that your story is interesting. However, I really hope that you'll be able to edit and fix things here and there. There's nothing wrong with your writing, it's just the flow of the plot. You need to make it looks more...uhm, real? Like how after Sakura read the book and then there's suddenly an earthquake and THERE! Oh, a Hollow! I honestly cringed at that. There's nothing wrong with it, it's just too abrupt...you know? And how could they see Hollow? People who can see Hollow are those who have reiatsu and as far as I know, chakra and reiatsu are two completely different things (not that I didn't know you know). Also, I think it doesn't make sense how those Shinigamis asking the Shinobi to train, I mean, Ichigo can be a shinigami because his father is also a shinigami, and he's kind of a human, shinigami, and quincy whereas these shinobis are only humans so it doesn't make sense for them to be a shinigami. Also saying that, "but we Shinigamis from the other dimension won't think it'll be easy for us to come here whenever a hollow appears." uhm, if it's not easy for the shinigami then its not easy either for the Hollow to make an appearance in the Shinobi world, you see that doesn't make sense. Also its a shinigami's job to dispose the Hollow no matter how inconvenient it is for them to go back and forth from Soul Society to the Shinobi world. So saying that it'll not be easy for them is like seeing an employee in a conpany given a job but he "doesn't think" he could do it so he asked someone from different company to do it for him. It's like that, don't you think? I think you should rewrite it and make it a bit realistic, I'm sure it'll be better. Though, I know it was written 10 years ago and I'm sure your writing have improved as years passed by so I'm expecting a lot for the future chapters :)

Please understand I meant no harm by criticizing your work. I was simply just letting you know what I think, I hope you won't take it by heart, ne? since it's your decision, after all, whether you want to rewrite it or not (though I hope you will, hehe).

Don't stop writing,
Cheers :)

OH MY GOD YOU UPDATED! LOVE THE STORY BTW

Anyways since part 2 is almost done and you will post it in two weeks time? (Please tell me you would) I can breathe now hahaha

Hmm, hiatus?

Author-san, can you continue this story?
I love this story very much

Love it! Please update

wonderful, wonderful .I came here to talk about all the chapters I read, and I qie tell you is ê writes so well, and I've read your fanfic twice as good is that it is so addictive.

...it seems like this story has dragged on too long...

oh my gosh. is her memory finally gonna come back? when hollows started attacking the village, it was good to see some of the tension being released from the main plot, it was like old, simpler times in the story

at this point i'm just as confused and clueless as sakura ;o

it seems like everything went from 'eh' to 'ahhh!'...so much, maybe too much, is going on right now

pretty good filler...on what got the story line to this point

i really wish sakura would hurry up and get her memory back...or toshirou finds about shuuhei and fight him :)