please updat this has actually hooked me to be honest i didnt realize there were only three chapters

umm... huh? what did Kyo do?

I love it! Keep it going!

I'm guessing that kyo was the one who raped her in way update soon when you have the chance

wouldnt he turn into a rat when he hugged her? Also, had did the rapist know her name? Otherwise it was ok

this was an overall good story. It may seem strange but I like sad stories like this, esspecially because of all the feeling in the story.

Love it :3

Update cause I'd like to hear more

kyo is the one that raped her i know it how elece would the man have known her name

oh brother, kyo's the one who raped tohru? great chapter.

oivay! great chapter.

oivay, what a mess. great start\chapter.

okay, your story has a good start. but you need to work on a few things. first, start by making you parapraghs longer and useing shorter sentences. be more discriptive in places with big changes in senery. you could also give your readers a feeling that comes with whatever is going on, like 'his eyes were cold as ice' or 'the wood felt grainy under her fingers'. dont be afraid to write in though. some people use indented words or '...'. whatch the way you use your words too. some times you had the write though just not the right words. when you said 'Just then there’s a crash from downstairs Tohru jumps scaredly.' you used your wording a little off. what might of worked better would be 'just then a crash was herd down stairs. the noise made tohru jump in fright.'

try useing some of this to an advantage to get better at wrighting. hope it helped!

nice story! continue writing!

wah! i love it! PLEASE UPDATE SOON! .

Great Story! Write more please!