mikey was being,Gulp...mature!?
:D

Hilarious! I know it's a few years since you wrote this, but thanks for posting it :)

that was a cool story ilove mikey

Both chapters are so darn funny and cute. I love your Mister Michelangelo voice the best of all. Sorry I didn't read this when it first came out. Brava!

Splinter and M&M's? Cool! I love Mikey, he's cute, as are all of the turtles at 12 years old. Good story!

Hold hands, Leo and Raph! Man, they must hate you for that one! :-P

Aww, and I'm glad Mikey's back to normal! Mister Michelangelo is just not as much fun! Besides, Leo's sposed to be the uptight-*is being glared at*...I mean, the mature and sensible one...yes...:-P

And what a damn cool ending!

:-D

(LOL) Nice! I loved how Mikey pretended to grow up and lost it all to the candy bar. Cute. :D

First, I need to point this part out, before I launch into my review.

I'm not sure, but - I think you left out a word or two here, near the end. . . “Yes my son, it is good to have you back. It is, as the wise man once said,” Splinter bent over, picking up a bag of M&M’s, “Live a little.”

If you omit 'Splinter bent over, picking up a bag of M&M's' and then merge the two parts of his last sentence, this is how it will read - It is, as the wise man once said, live a little.

Did you mean to say 'good to live a little'? Not sure but the sentence how it is in your story reads awkwardly, just a bit.

Anyway, enough of that. I loved this. Mike is so funny trying to act all grown up. Old Farts? Indeed. LOL Hilarious!

Oh, and don't worry about your story ending up closer to Christmas than Halloween. It was a very enjoyable read, so it's good for all seasons.

Good job!

Be blessed,

Rene'

Aww..this is so cute! It reminds me of my lil' cuzin wen she tried to act older and she's seven!

I can't wait for another update soon!

There must be more! Come on! Funny. Awesome. Must have more. :D

i was wondering when he'd slip up on the big words. "sati..."

Arrgh! Now that you're making a new story i'm remembering i forgot to review the other one! gotta go.

Can't wait for the next one! I'll try not to nag!

This is a very original idea. I'm super curious to see how it turns out. please update!

update soon

Glad that you're still writing. :0)

Well, this looks good. There were a couple of instances where you accidentally omitted a word or two that conjoined a thought, but otherwise this was well written.

My favorite part was the latter half, whem Mike addressed Master Splinter as Mister Splinter, dressed to the max, all haughty and mature. Very funny. His use of indescribable behavior and then his stumble with satisfactory was hilarious. LOL He had one word right, the other not so. Typical kids. :0)

And Jubinal. LOL Oh, very funny indeed.

Not sure if this is a one shot, but if it isn't, you can easily add to it. Just HOW is Mike going to get his brothers to believe he's truly grown-up - or, face reality and realize he never will. Bwahahaha.

Loved this. To the C2 file!

Be blessed,

Rene'