I love it. This chapter is my favorite. It's Flinda-only-really-Fiyeraba, which, IMO, is the next best thing to actual Flinda. Great story (:

oh. oh oh oh.

you were killing me with the repetitions of "Oh, Elphaba... you're going to destroy me," but that last line?

*dead from all the awesome*

I absolutely loved this chapter!

'She narrowed her eyes at him, though she didn't need to try any harder to see his intention; he wore his heart on his sleeve. After a beat, she raised her broom a notch higher, breaking his heart. "You should get out of here," she ordered. "I'll kill you before I let you turn me in."'

-Poor Elphie. Poor Fiyero! There's so much sadness in this chapter. It's so heartbreaking to see Elphaba actually use her broom as a weapon against Fiyero.

'"No, not really stupid. Elphaba -"

"Stop calling me that," she barked.

"It's your name!"

"It's not. I'm the Wicked Witch of the West!"

"That's a costume, Elphie. That isn't you."

"Who's to say?" she asked, pacing a little. "Who's to say it isn't me? I'm the Wicked Witch of the West," she repeated, though for whose benefit it couldn't be said.'

-I'm not sure what this says about me, but I always like seeing Elphaba act a little...erm...unhinged. It just proves that no matter how strong she is, too much pressure from the people gets to her. Not to mention all of the years that she's spent alone.

Wait, is that the end? FFnet says it's complete, but that can't be the end, can it?

I do like how you turned things around in this chapter, although it was a little jarring to suddenly be in her POV when the first three chapters were in his. Poor Elphaba, trying to drive him away to save him. But seriously, that can't be the end! We don't get to see them finally together?

I like how you're weaving things together but the fourth chapter twiches speakers and maybe even times fast without indication or lead in, so it was rather hard to follow. unless you're trying to write like faulkner, a little more clarification would be helpful

Nice! Update soon!

-deep breath-

Aw.

Love it; can't wait for the next update.

I love how you turn the lines. They work so well in this context.

"It's your name!"

"It's not. I'm the Wicked Witch of the West!"

"That's a costume, Elphie. That isn't you."

I think this was my favorite part. He completely calls her on it, even though she still pushes him away. Great.

Poor Fiyero. It's very understandable why she had to be so cold, but still. Poor Elphaba, too, for always holding everyone at arm's length.

I'm so glad you updated. Totally made my day.

You can't leave your fanfic like this, in my opinion I feel like you should write some more. I enjoyed reading every chapter you wrote but when I read the last one, twice, I had the feeling as if you had ended it abrupt, like in the middle of a sentence or only telling half of the story. I get the feeling that there should be more.

Maybe you should consider adding an epilogue or a fifth chapter.

Wow. I really like this story, and I am intrigued by your insight into one Prince Fiyero Tiggular. Are you going to continue with this story? The romantic in me wants to see what happens when he finally gets his wish. Will you end that story with "You're going to destroy me?" because, of course, it's so true. And will you follow the musical to the very end where there's a happy ending? And will you change the line to something delightfully (or dreadfully) corny like "You've saved me" or some such? I'm interested. Keep writing if it so fits our fanct.

I like this chapter...

I know that Fiyero would probably actually feel like he was being a coward for not telling Glinda the truth, so I think that line is okay, but I also thing that he stayed with Glinda because he WAS a gentleman. He did not want to break her heart, especially since Elphie was nowhere to be found.

Update soon!

such beautiful, beautiful, angst! You make my heart break for them. Thanks for the update. Keep em comin'!

Hooray! And now I get to start this day well too. You're officially my favorite person on the planet.

I love this one. The part with the hair and the tiara is perfect and so utterly real to life.

"Fiyero nodded. “I wasn’t having much fun, either.”

“You never do, when you’re forced to dress up,” she smiled."

Haha. Silly male Fiyero.

"He didn’t feel like much of a man, staying with Glinda to make her happy because the woman he loved didn’t “want to be found”"

Big melty puddle on the ground now.

My two favorites in one day! I'm overjoyed :-D Seriously, I can't tell you how much your updates cheered me up. Reading beautiful writing is So much better than moping. Thanks!

I like where I think this is heading. I especially like getting into Fiyero's head. Thanks. Please update when you can!

“Oh, Elphaba,” he sighed. “You’re going to destroy me.”

Aw! Poor Fiyero! This was beautiful