Honestly. I can't decide if I liked it.
It's idk too dramatic and no coordination can't follow it.
Some chapters were cute some pretty annoying.
And I hate the fact that Bella's character was idk kind of weak. It didn't take her time to fall for Edward. Beh

This had a good plot, but was a little confusing. Overall a great story.

That comment about vampires cant have kids is soooo funny now after that last book! But great story can't stop reading it!

ALMOST CRIED, HELL I DID CRY

this was a good story, but no one ever forgets who people are after they have tried to commit suicide. He should have been put into therapy and he would have learned why he became a womanizer and why he treated Bella so shabbily. I think this would have made a better story and also him trying to get Bella back, by trying to show her he had changed. Bella was wrong to keep his child away but she was hurt and scared.

I don't think English is your native tongue; it shows.
You should have used a beta. This is really badly written.

He should become vampire

This was an amazing story! I loved it so much and some parts were so hilarious! :)

I could not stop laughing at the ending to this chapter its just to funny

Grandpa Charlie, let's go fuck had me dying

Did they use a condom

this story is not good. please donot right ever ever this kind of story ever again

I laughed my head off at the fucking part! hehe. fuuunnnnyyyy. :)

...
BOOM. I loved the story... its amazing! I think your a bit young to write lemons though... but oh well! is that you on your profile pic? your name is Shirley right? anyway, its really good and I should of read it earlier.
I know how you feel with all the laziness and stuff, I'm as lazy as fuck nowadays :\ either way, its an amazing story and I will read your other fanfics... if you have any, I havnt checked yet.
keep writing!
Acssc Movies
xxx

To tell u the truth I hate it