Well done. Your a really good writer.

I'm looking forward to the next chapter! I hope you update soon.

I like the theme here but I don't know what you are doing with it.

It reminds me of a b&w movie I saw w/ Marilyn Monroe- but I have not recognized a scene from there yet.

:D

I like this, I like it a lot! You're so descriptive and vivid that I can understand the actual pacing of this story. Please continue this story; it's just getting good.

I like this very much. I think in places its a bit OOC, but I enjoy that, so go figure. D And I love the idea of Rikku calling Auron "the grumpy guy in the big red coat". Well done, looking forward to an update.

Cheers,

LN.

Oh I do love this story, yes I do.

Your characterization feels spot on and the description is at just the right level.

Overall...awesome.

Yay! You updated! I liked it, it was great! Update soon, ok?

This is FABULOUS. Wow. Definitely the best thing I've read in a long time. I hope you'll update this again soon, because it always sucks to get into something only to have it die. Yay!

Hehehe, another sweet chapter! :D

hi

since you have taken the time into thanking me for adding your story into my favorites i would tell you what i think about your story. first of all, this is one of the best and probably my favorite serious-humor(which suprisingly made me laugh, and i don't do that often) story.i think chapter 1 already made us, the readers, want was a sense of closure that wasn't too rushed or too long. the lenght of your chapter was fairly good, you don't lack descriptions nor do you have too much of it, and i think none of them were out of up the good work and i am looking forward for your update

-fae

ggah!this is one of the best serious/humorous fic i have read!Auron's last lines were realy good.i'm looking forward to the next chapter!

-Gel

-adds to fave and alerts-

lol, that was so cool! Looking forward to the next chapter! :)

Funny story ideas here! :)

But sometimes the dialogue confuses me...like, when there is no mention of vowels whatsoever in some conversations...

Your transitions need work, and the overall effect is a little choppy, cause sometimes I get confused as to whose thoughts I'm reading next.

But yeah, I thought this had a good start. Nice one! :D

That was simply one of the best serious/humorous stories I have read ion a while. I do believe you captured Rikku perfect too. She was hyper, but not so much so that it was annoying. And her quest for soap was a great plot idea. Poor Rikku though, she spent half the time wrapped in a towel. The ending was the best though. Just for Auron's last lines. Great job! Gin~

-adds to faves-

That was fun ! I hope you update soon.

This story is just SUPER-DUPER!i love it!now all you have too do is update asap!