I feel bad for Soifon and the fanfic was lovely it really has feeling towards Soifon and Yoruichi's undying love to each other but,ended quickly as yoruichi dies and it's almost like Romeo and Juliet in a way and I hope to see more to story

Beautiful piece of writing. I was guessing what was going to happen and never expected it to end with Yoruichi dying but then everything made sense... Not many writers can keep that suspense so WELL DONE! Keep it up!

i like it mabe you could do one a little less angesty