Trying to blink away tears...

A fun little drabble, very poignant. I'm glad you didn't do anything more than imply how bad Naruto's situation, as mob references are never very fun (my only defense for Fly Free is that I wasn't quite aware of just how bad they are). And you didn't make the Yondaime out to be either The Ace or give him the Ron the Death Eater treatment, both of which are all too common.

i agree with slayer end this could definatelye be put into a full story happy or sad but thats up to you but if you did epand on the story might i suggest something i think few have tried, have the kyuubi bring in the yondiam, because the kyuubi is not that evil in reality and is sickend by the way the viligers treat naruto, by useing the memory minato left in the seal and some of naruto's DNA (the part that comes from minato) to make a liveing clone of minato. just a thought

Thst's ultimate punishment for you...though it can also be called a blessing, Minato still saw his son grew up.

Wah!

That was so short but by the end I was crying my eyes out...T_T

Poor Minato...(goes off to angst somewhere)

So cool. I really can think Minato sitting their, watching and gritting his teeth, waiting for them to realise, to actually see... How frustrating it must be for him. But right to the point, a well done job on his perspective. I love this little piece. It has so much heart... *sigh* Really, good job there.

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Lolchen

Great story, in my fic something similar happens.

Ya know, this actually brought a tear to my eye when I first read it. No joke. But, one question, why don't you turn this story into something bigger? Find something to make this oneshot blossom into a happy story. As they say, the greatest journey begins with a single step.

this is amazing! two thumbs up!

This makes me sad. I need to favorite this and then go find a nice happy story filled with chocolate bunnies...*sniff*poor Naruto! *cries*

Dang that was sad. It was probebly one of the sadist things I've read yet, and thats saying ALOT. I've read so many sad stories that most normel people whould have had to go to tharepy by the time they have finished all the sad stories I've read. The way you worded this is vary good yet you didn't go on and on like alot of people do. You got the the point acros vary well. Thats probebly what the Yondaime would feel like if he sa how they were treating Naruto. Summery: You did a good job.

oh cool...

Beautiful.

wow nice story! i enjoyed it! :D

So sad! This is really good!