I really like your story and your way with words. however, your spelling is absolutely deplorable, do use spell check, the miss-spellings take away from the great story.

i'm glad Jacob took his sorry self away. he's worse than leah making everyone miserable. he's a sixteen year old who didn't even imprint on bella, and even if he had she still had the option of rejecting him.

Edward -with-the-iron-control has finally slipped! yaaaay

it's writing NOT wrighting!

I fear you are not getting the reviews you want because of the difficulty in reading this. it's not very cohesive in a lot of places; the camping trip to Alaska for instance, so you know. I think you can do a lot better if you don't get ahead of yourself so much. try outlining what you want to say before you say it.

this is an excellent story, it's just very difficult to read without punctuation and so many run on sentences. do you have spell check? the box for reviews does. do you have any one to beta it for you. sorry, just keep writing.

Just came across this and I am enjoying it so far!

Couldn't get past chapter two as the spelling, grammer, continual capitals and lay out was terrible. Can't stand it.

Thank you for all the hard work. Your story was fun to read.

I personally do not care if there are writing errors

I was able to follow your thoughts and the story line just fine

keep up the good work

Just wanted to let you know that you have some typos on this chapter. you put where instead of 'were'. The second is that passed as in giving a heirloom to some one is spelled like I wrote earlier 'passed' instead of "pasted". I am not meaning to be rude, but as someone that has a learning disability that loves to read, it is something I pick up on and is rather confusing when thing like that happen. I know it might be an honest mistake and sometimes spell check doesn't correct those type of mistake. It does not pick up the meaning of the sentences.

I love this story. You should write a sequel.

Great story! I loved espacially your version of Charlies and Renees reaction towards their engagement - Charlie accepting Edward staying alone with Bella for the nights was a great idea, it was nice to see him so much at ease with their relationship.

I was really sorry for Jasper and sometimes even scared of him. Finding him in bed with Bella was really creepy.

What I loved most was the way you elaborated the hole electricity-idea, coming to it's climax at their climax! haha

But... (although I know by your AN's that you don't like reading this over and over again) your grammar and spelling is awful and at times even painful to read. You might not like to hear it, but those are essential writing skills and reviews are meant to help you improve your writing skills. So please accept critique with the same grace as you receive our praise.

Enjoyed your story! Thank you!

I have to say I am loving this story! It's very original! I love the way you tell it also. I have something to say about the negative comments too,

this is a fanfiction site. Anyone who can't figure out what you are trying to say because of a mis-spelled word, or a paragraph with different peoples dialect, must be completely ignorant. I understand that this is not, published fiction. There are no editors to read and re-read this over and over again for grammatical and spelling issues. People need to get over it. I think you have done a great job! I can understand what you mean through it all, and I am loving it!