Even though I felt that a lot of the drama was forced, I still enjoyed the story. It felt like your writing got better even toward the end. Your newer story is also good, so your writing skills are progressively improving, great job.

Eye rolling so hard right now. This chapter is a prime example of my complaint from the last review. First we are told that Haley is such a saint because she's putting Nathans child with Rachel ahead of her own feelings. Now that she's pregnant too, she's going to run away and lie to him and I guess who cares what's best for Nathan and this child right? It doesn't make any sense but it's happening because it seems like that makes the story better. It doesn't. Now her weakness is glaringly obvious and she just seems selfish and kinda psycho.

It would been better if she had stayed and told him about it but still kept him at arms length and let him deal with that. This runaway pregnancy storyline makes your main female character extremely unlikeable

It's an interesting story, I guess I can say that much. But it kind of loses its greatness when you have to use forced drama, contrived storylines and weak characters in order to keep it interesting. Your plot alone should have been enough to keep it going without having to write your characters as having the street smarts of a mailbox in order to make it all work out .

awesome story you are a wonderful writer your stories are amazing please write more stories

Super terrific story. Could not stop reading it at all

love it !

i like how it is developing and also the plot of the story seems intriguing . i really like dis

i totaly loved the entire story i wanted them to stop fighting and all the drama to end so they would get back together but all together i give it an A plus

FREAKING AWESOME!

great story!

UPDATE or write a NEW story plz

Its over. And you ended it so was an awesome fanfic. Cant wait to read your next story.

AW. How many times ahve I said that during reading this? LOL. It will never be enough. That was just awesome. Great job.

AW. Im so happy. Now Haley has to realize that she isnt going to "coexists" becuse they share a child. But that they need to betogther. As a married couple.

That was just awesome. LOL. Its about time Nathan stood up to Dan. Glad that that is finally over. Cant wait for the Naley reunion.