While the story so far is not bad, I do think if you're going to be using Japanese words intermixed with the English you should provide a translation at least at the end of your chapter You ca not assume that all of your readers are familiar with Japanese culture in a way that will allow them to read it without pause. It can be slightly off-putting, making someone turn away from the story without giving it a second thought. I find I have done it in the past and have tried to catch this issue in other pieces.

Besides that issue not bad keep up the work

I would like to read more please?

it's suppose to be Ootori

um...i know that anime is from japan but please stop using japanesse in fanfiction. it doesn't suit well with english and please write the translate because there might be people who doesn't understand that

Can't wait for the next chapter!

Please continue.

Please update soon!

i love your story so far. i can't wait for the next chapter i hope you update soon!

I laugh so much. This is so much crazy fun. I want more. Update please.

wow

o,o

o.o

OMG

oh wow

oh boy