I am addicted to this story, like there are typical typos and the like, but it’s a juicy cluster fuck and I’m here for it xD

Emmett

I think it was good don’t worry about it girl.

I HATE YOUR FUCKING GUTS! YOU JUST HAD TO DO THAT!

-MARIA

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Poor Bella! So much drama! If only they all listened to her! And, well Jake is a bit of an obnoxious jerk. He is pretty cool but...

Overall, the story itself was simply...meh.
I'll have you know, I'm really not into flaming authors, and I'm not about to start now. This is merely constructive criticism, and I hope it helps, at least a little bit.
While you had elaborate details and descriptions, which is great for any story, a lot of your writing seemed...rushed, choppy, and somewhat prematurely done to me. It felt unnatural and borderline awkward at times. While it was legible, the grammar wasn't the best I'd ever seen. I found the writing to be occasionally inconsistent, and while it had its moments, somewhat superficial.
The plot and idea could've been expanded on in a much shorter span that forty two chapters. There really wasn't much dimension to the characters (hardly any effective body language, serious conversations, more than one side to each character, etc.).
Take a bit more time, consider each entry, and it'll improve.
Whether you appreciate the advice, or you glance at this and think, 'oh, well she's just full of hatred and bitterness and she's a troll and she doesn't know anything,' or something along those lines, anyway, I really hope you take it into consideration. I'm not saying it's a bad story, or calling you a bad writer, not at all.
I'm just saying that everyone (including myself, definitely myself) has room for improvement. I'm not a piece writer, J.K Rowling isn't a perfect writer, no one is.
But think about it, alright?
Good luck, Ella.

You've made Bella in a slut

I'm tearing up, this is like, the cutest story ever. I'm not a huge fan of canon couples usually, so this was great to read. You have a great talent. Thanks for bringing us this awesome story.
-CheerfulChatterbox

That was a beautiful chapter love the drama

I don't normally reveiw stories I read. I found the chapters you said sucked rather instructive as it contained significant detail which is essential. Some chapters, were slightly better written than others. But by far, this was the best fanfiction I've ever read.

Lol

U R AWSOME THIS STORY IS THE MOST AMAZING ONE EVA

please do a sequel loved this story it was the only story about bella emmet that has more than one chapter thx xx

i love it