Nice fanfic.
I see how old it is, so it will never get updated, but nice nevertheless.
Thanks for writing and have a nice day!

"nearby Overmind" is probably meant to be a "nearby overlord", as the Overmind is the leader of the swarm, not a unit carrying flying giant fly.
Interesting premise.

really good story keep writing

good story please continue

sucks that you discontinued this

Hmmmm I'm having a hard time envisioning raynor you could probably do a better job explaining but other than that it's a good start but don't cop out on the action you could have added at least another thousand words for a combat scene.

This is promising... You have intrigued me...

Both Raynor and Kerrigan pondered the question, but Raynor, with his past as a soldier, reached a conclusion first.
Sarah's knowledge of tactics and staregy would be greater than Jim; she was in the Ghost program since age 8. That was part assassin part officer training from hell. The reason Arturus abandoned her was revenge. Sarah decapitated his father and took the head. He was pissed at that for obvious reasons. Also wasn't the cerebrate suppose to be making the commands? Looked like it was a test though...not sure of the physibility pf the tactic was though. Mutalisk shots don't riqushet inwards like yours did. 36 would be enough to take the base but would require you attacking the air defenses as you went not ignoring them...but this is a fic and you altered it in a way that was believable!

As I said before please restart this!

Hyperion's engines explode and watch it drift to the ground helplessly.
In canon Jim tried to save her but failed to even reach the planet.

Hope to see this restarted!

With info available from Starcraft 2 this could be made into a real killer fic!
Overmind's plans against the Devil...he went up a few levels in badass with that!

WHY IT DISCONTINUED? D-;)

nice work

this story is AWESOME and plz do add more chapters i think this story could be great if continued

Great, i was dreaming that Raynor was infected and now i find this. this is good, really good now whats you must do is continue this and of course why don't infest more heros or Raynor/Sarah try make better infesteds Terrans and infesteds Goliaths or something like that. reptilia... you would please continue this?

Hmm... I would like to see a new chapter even though this a few years old.

This fic is awesome! :D Please continue! :D