Great.

[grin]

brilliant

I liked it. That was a good story.

Good story. It seems Yugi comes to dance for the money. Yami gives yugi the money but he probably would even if Yugi didn't dance.

Strange situation, and even stranger to see Yugi angry and irritated and hateful. How is it that you can make one-shots that could easily blossom into full-blown stories? It must be a gift _

Nice. I want to see what happens next.

I want more. I want to know why Atemu is so confident that Yugi will come back when Yugi keeps shooting him down despite their mutual attraction to each other.

Damn, girl! And you say you like JS? The play and emotion in this goes way beyond mine! At least, that's the fangirlish response. It's always nice to have those, isn't it?

Short, sweet, to the point while giving so much detail. You leave us with delicious insights to the history of these two - "He always comes back", "the hatred and lust in his eyes" - without going into the rather mundane nitty-gritty that would cheapen the exchange with too much baggage. You simply must write the story that goes along with this. I demand it! XD

Until next time, take care!

~ Ocean

"His canines flashed white in the light; he brought his finger to his lips and sucked the drink’s lingering wetness from the tip."

Wow, not one for subtlety, are you? ;)

Very nice.

Yuugi pole-dances often in fanfiction? I'm obviously new to this fandom... :wonders...:

Good job. It was very sexy. XP

What a delicious story. ::grins:: Hello! I am now in California! WHORAY FOR COLLEGE.

I'm way too lazy to log in at this point, but you know who I am.

This was an awesome one-shot. I really want the rest of the story now though. You have no idea how frustrating that is.

And by the way, I was definitely feeling some Edward vibes coming from Yami in a few spots.

Nice job. ;)

And as silly as it may be. I'm terribly curious to know what you *thought* the lyrics were to that song. Perhaps you can tell the story when you start the next chapter/oneshot/myfix.

Oh. *claps appreciatively* Very alluring and sexy; I won't deny, however, that had there been more interaction between them I would've been happier. xD But you wrote it, and it's got action anyway, I'm content.

You know, now that you've written this, I have a really strong urge to ask that you make it into a longer fic... xD

I find it freakily cool that Atemu/Yami can countdown Heba/Yuugi's arrival at the bar counter. o_o Beats all the psychic powers I know they might have...

I liked it lots! ] (Plus that there weren't mistakes, which is sort of rare around here on xD)

kaoru; hime no ichigo

So cool! And it's only a one-shot? I hope you decide to made a chapter fic about this.

thanx for the post!