In light of DH, Snape's pure hatred of Lily was almost shocking. Aside from that, your portrayal of him could well have been spot-on. Excellent, considering it was uploaded eleven years ago.

No constructive critisism(sp?) here because you don't need any. That was great! It explains all of Snape's actions in one short chapter. Amazing. You're a fabulous author. Keep up the great work. Now if you'll excuse me, I have a ton of homework to do that's do by Monday and I have to help build a deck and write more of my fic. Bye now!

- Shannon -

You really shoulden't hate this strory. It's really good. I like it a lot. I haven't seen a story about Lily and James death from Snape's POV. It was intresting. I don't think that Snape is that bad. He just has a really bad past and some really bad experences. Well... That's just my opinion, and I'm getting off subject. Anway, great story. I liked it alought.

That's good. I like reading about snape's POV. That's really good.

Great...Snape to the tee. Conflicted briliance...

The Emperor call for more...more...more

That was really good! ...Er...I think

Interesting,kind of...Well...Different. Kind of mushy,I think but good.

This was great!

You are the master of soliloquies! (sp?) You are a very talented writer, Nemo, you really are.

I loved it , it was quite good . I was writing a fic about him having a daughter but I decided not to post it . I posted one about him having a wife , and she writheres away with grief over her older brother's death (James) and she loses the child withen her belly at the same time as she loses herself .

This is really moving. You are great at dramatic writing. I've always wondered about Snape, and this is the best story/soliq. I've read yet. Good work!

thats really good It shows a side of Snape we've never seen... If you hate it thats your own thing

::sniff:: Do you know that this is sad and depressing? Well, it is. It portrays Snape's feelings very well. You write very good monologues...I really like yours! Even though they depress me!

Don't worry about hating your story at first. As Roald Dahl says, "You must have a degree of humility. The writer who thinks that his work is marvelous is heading for trouble." This had a lot of meaning to it, but you must work on punctuation, and structure. It's kind of all over the place: make each paragraph devoted to one topic. Move onto the next in the next paragraph. Sorry, but my English teachers have drilled it painfully into my head. ;-)

I like this- don't hate it, it was really good