the poem was incredible the writing capture the entire story and about bella's choices story had me reading it again and incredible.

Omg... This was an amazing poem . I normally don't read poems so ur lucky I stumbled upon it . It was kinda like a what the heck moment . It really does explain that part in eclipse . AMAZING

About Jacob kissing Bella outside the tent, I COULD NOT AGREE MORE! Don't get me started on Jacob-He is not worthy to lead the tribe, and should grow up immediately!

wow

awesome! those poems r amazing! (damn! y can't i be that good) lol

You are an AMAZING poet! I loved your poems!

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nicely done.

INTENSE.

It's just so fitting, I'm amazed. I think I almost started crying. Actually, I AM. -.-"

Your poetry is amazing, and your comparisons are just too perfect!

Awesome job!

~Bal-chan

(btw, yey for another person who was sick when jacob and bella were kissing)

Woah.

That was amazing.

It really and truly was.

I really like Fire and Ice.

And your writing really fit in with it.

You really captured Bella in it.

I dont know what else to say other than I cant stop reading it.

Its really really good.

i love eclipse

and jacob and edward both

this poem is amazing

only few poems catch my attention but this one definatley did

I LOVE the first two stanzas! (Not including the original poem as a stanza.) I mean, the whole thing is great, but those two... amazing. One thing I noticed: I'm pretty sure you meant 'perish', to die, and not 'parish', a church. My favorite line is, "A frosty flame erupts within." Especially with the 'frosty flame' oxymoron-paradox thing. Anyway. Overall, very, very good.

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-The Stupid Crazy Insane Idiotic Weirdo known as Tassel630

-Please don't respond to this review-

aw...even though i hate her for screwing things up for a while there, at least she made the right choice. great job by the way ].

Your poem captures it perfectly! That's all that really need to be said! I agree with you so much on the fact that I have a horrible feeling that Bella will go looking for Jacob. I think I will cry if that happens...

~Azaria.

Omg, this is brillent! So beautiful! I love it! Keep on writing!

Oh wow! WOW! This is...I'm speechless! This fits seamlessly into the original poem, its perfect answer/response. You caught Bella so well! That was amazing! And don't be too hard on poor Bella. I think she's made her choice now, she's let Jake go. At the end of Eclipse she knew that she'd made mistakes and that it was time to choose, so she did. But anyway, awesome work! I love it!