nice piece! and Edmund sitting on top of Peter and their conversation there was worth the money alone! hee hee!

I feel like there should be one more chapter here,
but otherwise it's very good!

Wonderful story! I'm glad that the situation was finally resolved! D

Wow. I've read this before. I can't believe I didn't comment on it then! This has an extremely sweet ending and it almost made me cry. Thank you so much, this was beautiful!

There were quite a few typos in the form of missing words or phrases, so it might help to look over it again and fix those.

Well done!

You did the humor thing pretty well.

This is very good

Loved it!

Luna

wow I really liked this story, it was in depth, LONGER than a one shot *happy dance* and verry well put together, you did wonderful. Hope to see more from you.

Wildfire

this story was truly and absolutely fabulous. i'm not sure what else i can say really.

the bickering amongst edmund and peter amused me to no end. you managed to grasp edmund's exasperating haughty attitude. it was hilarious really. srsly, this: “I suppose you did me a great kindness. And now you try to blind me only minutes after I am awake. Ed, there are better ways to kill me.”

“I’m glad you see it my way, dear my brother. I did you a kindness greater than you understand at this moment. And really, Peter if I was trying to kill you, I would have succeeded.”

yeah, i swear, that had me giggling for like, 5 minutes. i'm pretty sure that's not even an exaggeration. i honestly think their bantering made the story. it was done perfectly.

I love it!

NO! I don't WANT this story to end! Make a sequel, please?

OK, great story! The only thing I would change is when you said 'Her brother, whom only a month ago would never had complimented her, let alone allow her to be in the same room as him' doesn't sound right. Usually, when people say something like that, they say the worst part first, so it would be 'Her brother, who a month ago would never had allowed her to be in the same room as him, let alone compliment her'.

And the only other errors were the very rare and few grammatical problems-usually no comma where there should be.

Oh, Peter! You need to sleep! And, hah! Peter doesn't know which way his rooms are!

I really enjoy your story. It is funny and touching at the same time. Please update soon.

I liked the way this chapter ended, but I was quite surprised to notice that you completed the story. If you're going to inflict a problem that has long term effects (like insomnia, or paralysis, or child abuse) then you need to have long term solutions. Identifying the solution to the problem is a major step forward, but it's not the end of the problem. It's like spending a book discovering someone's an alcoholic, but never finding out what, if anything, they do about it. I'd be happier if there was an epilogue or a one-shot two to three weeks down the road. A "normal" morning after a good nights sleep? I seriously doubt any of your readers would mind :)