Stupid James! The arrogant jerk! Ruining what Sev was going to say to Lily!

You portrayed Sev really nicely in this story. Well done!

I really feel for Snape. Being in love with someone and losing her by screwing up and wanting to look cool for his friends. Then facing a lifetime of loneliness, destruction, remorse, and redemption.

I liked this!

Good job!

Poor Sev! D: I feel so bad for him... your story echoes the chapter in DH! Thanks for a great story!

Lovely story, but you need to break it up into smaller paragraphs.