I had hoped this would have been a TomxGretchen but I find it leaning towards an TomxAriana, I am disappointed...

O-O he... blew up the sorting hat? Oh ma goodness...

I would have loved it if you had used the Merlin from BBC, that would have been an awesome and hilarious crossover, everyone expecting Merlin to be this old man in a pointy hat and a starry robe, and instead is just a teenage looking boy with a red shirt, a blue neckerchief and a brown sheepskin coat, and who is over thousands of years old.

But Dumbledore could have read Gretchen mind and have figure out what happened.

Tom still is Voldemort, but I like to imagine his head turned into a 11 years old boy mentality.. :D

Ravenclaw? NOOOO!

Oh, let the game BEGIN!
Merlin? Haha, where is Morgana then?

i really like it! xxx

This would be such a great story if it weren't for the minor mistakes. Lucius wouldn't be in this because T.M.R went to school around the 1940's, so it would be Abraxus Malfoy. I don't know if I'm the only one bothered by the little slip ups but I am kind of a perfectionist. I mean no disrespect and I'm sure you're a great writer but when it comes to Harry Potter, I have no mercy.

By the way, as an afterthought, I think you said at some point that Tom never meant to become a mass murderer, he just wanted to purge the world of mudbloods. Well, that kind of contradicts itself. He'd have to kill people at some point if her was ever to eliminate those of mixed heritage. Maybe you should rework that part, eh?

Myrtle was a third year when Tom was in fifth. She wouldn't even have been in Hogwarts when he started, much less in the same class as someone in his year.

I think it's interesting that you chose to connect Tom and Gretchen through her desire to bring someone back to life (I of course do not know who that is yet, although I can guess).

However, I don't think you're doing a great job of keeping Tom in character and your grammar and spelling mistakes are very distracting. It's a very interesting idea, I admit, but not particularly well executed. Perhaps if you got a beta-reader to edit for you, you might find yourself doubly satisfied with your final product. Frankly, I probably would have added this to my favorites by now if it weren't for all of those unfortunate mistakes.

Once again, great idea, rather poor writing.

i love your work on this story, i read all the way through and the only problem that i have with it is that there were tons of spelling mistakes and so it got a little confusing to read, but overall good job!

~NTG(Nana The Great)

POOR Gretchen!

i like the idea of sending him back in time. can't say anything else until i have read a little more.

Excellent chapter, does gretchen know she is the master of death?