very good

I had to read it twice to understands who you were referring to, but you included everyone and the whole storyline was wrapled up. I'll say it, it was scary and sad. Tragic, even. But ir was also beautiful. I usually never read second person narrative, but this was good.

This is amazing. I'm not even sure what to say. This is surprising and sort of devastating. I understand why a you mean by "creepy" but that isn't the word I would use. Thank you.

Damn.

(You did really well, this is a very intriguing and well written piece)

Excellent

Very interesting, I liked it.

Ohhh... Creepy. While hard to follow, the overall sense that everything is repeating, even in the phrasing of the story, totally makes up for it. That Harry is suddenly struck with fear and wants to make sure Albus can choose either way, even if he won't, is probably my favorite part. While Rosie is weighed down with parental judgement, Albus is hopefully freed from it because Harry doesn't necessarily want the next cycle to go exactly the way the last one went.
Very impressive. I'll definitely come back and read this again.
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ohgodohgodohgodohgodohgodohgod

Um, I'm going to be honest - I don't get it. I don't know who you're referring to; the references to 'blond boys' ripping wands out of hands is just so... I was like 'but wait, Voldemort doesn't have blond hair' and then 'is it referring to someone else?' but I still have no idea who.

I don't buy the 'Harry suddenly wonders if Albus is going to be like Albus Dumbledore and if something will happen to his daughter like it did to Ariana' - why?! The thought seems to come out of nowhere. Harry is nothing at all like Albus' father, Ginny nothing like Albus' mother, they live in completely different times and areas; what is it about *his* Albus that makes him think his son is like Headmaster Albus?

This would be a whole lot better if you came out and made your references explicit; e.g. "Albus' eyes twinkled, and Harry suddenly wondered..." or whatever. Name the blond boys offering handshakes and stealing wands and the redheaded girls doing... things (I got so confused with your stupidly coy references, I have no idea). If your message is that there's still Slytherin prejudice in this generation and this is bad [which I get, and agree with] then... it might be worth mentioning that before the last few lines of the story? And it might be worth not getting sidetracked with stuff like, what if we had a Dumbledore repeat? Because the two don't seem at all related.

I guess the idea of cycles and history repeating has potential to be creepy, but this really misses the mark. The writing style just screams 'you should be creeped out!' instead of the story showing me creepy coincidences/patterns, etc. If that makes any sense.

Beautiful.

Haven't bothered reading a non Dramione in ages because they're all crap (most of the Dramione too) but this is incisively observed, and exquisite.

In my opinion this wasn't actually written very well. I'm sorry.

I couldn't understand who you were referring to. And the comparisons seemed so tenuous. I wasn't sure where the creepy was.

This is beautifully poetic and deep. I love how much thought you put into it. It so brilliant that I get shivers when I read it.

Brilliant. Not that you need me to tell you that. :)

This fills me with sadness.
And the ending IS creepy. (The book, I mean) It gives me cold shivers.

That is terribly haunting and ominous and symbolic and I love it.