M, so this is why Vallejo was so biased against Frank being investigated by Fillmore. Though I am unsure of what to say about the pairing, since I like it and am freaked by it at the same time, I like the way you'd written it. Wordy enough to interest more reading yet not too much to bore.

I liked that you weren't rushing the fic. It stayed true to character. Nice work.

I'm not surprised about any slash going on at that age. You'd be surprised at how many people I know are either gay or lesbian or had and are having feelings for someone of the same gender- and I found out who when I was ten! Crazy world.

Not meaning to nitpick, but it's the Grim Reaper, not Wreaper. Faving this!

First establishing something:

Although I disagree with slash, especially at such a young age (they're twelve, right?) I was bored and this looked minorly good. Therefore, if I sound kinda rude, or like I'm flaming, it's just because I'm biased against slash and having a bad day.

Now...

As far as how my reading experience went-it wasn't too bad. I've definately seen worse. You're not one of those people who just takes a pairing they like and shoves it into other people's faces shouting "It's destiny!" or something corny. Actually, [if they weren't twelve], I think it would be a very believable way to put them together.

I also like how you tie in everything, keeping the theme of Heaven/hell all the way through the piece. it was a good way to end your story, too. I notice that you write very much with feeling; you keep Frank's mood and emotion in perspective in every single paragraph.

One thing-You mention that Frank 'spent his allowance as he got it', but Frank admits in the episode that he has no allowance any more. Just one thing I spotted that confused me, that's all.

Anyway, Good oneshot. I'll leave you be for now, but good luck with your next fanfictions.