Are you on my fave authours list? If not, why not? It denys the laws of nature!

I just came ound your profile and thought why not, was gifted with your work and now is begging for more. It has tempted my taste and and has dragged it along the floor for more.

I can't wait when you start writting again. Take what ever time since I can't really speak about hiatus.

Love Parallel rose.

God, this is adorable. The tension, the drama, the soft yet flaring passion to slit each others throats apart… how do you do it? I absolutely enjoyed this one-shot.

The beginning or the introduction, hinting Hilary’s drowsy state and her short journey to the dojo connects and blends with the opening sequence very well. But what really grips the attention, is your stroke of genius, the way you paint the juvenile, riled up feelings of our brave girl for the player and vice versa.

The humour is organised and beautifully timed and so is the conclusion.

I mean, there are so many instances you deserve to be complimented on… be it Tala’s plans against Hilary, the ones he was working on in-flight or her homicidal rage towards him and not to mention the hidden feelings they both share and the resulting activities from said feelings.

It all certainly fills the bill. Great Job Jess!

Anyway, the entire one-shot flows very naturally and apart from very little skips here and there; there is not much to assess critically.

Nicely done!

Thank you so much for writing and sharing this incredibly entertaining narrative.

I loved it.I hope this isnt a oneshot I want to read they gonna be friends with Benefits or are they gonna turn into a couple.

I like this. Their interaction is amusing and, oddly, spot on. The only bit that bothered me was "His lips grew closer. . ." I say that because "came" would have been a better word. I understand that it does fit in, but I personally found it uncomfortable. It's like his lips were growing bigger or something. Wierd.

The saying is a good one too. Are you continuing or is this a one-shot?

Ciao For Now Everyone!

Hahaha! You think that your going to get away with leaving it off there! That's a good one! Great joke! Seriously, it'll keep me laughing for days! Come on, update this. You know you wanna.

On another note, I do have to say that you are getting better. I mean you were great before but now your like...sumo great. I do wish that I could write like you. Your really very good. I have missed reading your stuff lately! This story was just the thing I needed right now! Thanks, the world needs more TalaxHil

This is...AWESOME! I love it. There really wasn't much OOC in this story, because Tala can act like that, and so can Hilary. And there weren't really any huge grammatical mistakes, so no worries. I like how you kept them in character but to where they would actually kiss each other. Anyway, could you do another one? please?

Wow, sometimes I wonder why you write.

Okay, not really, I know why you write: you're freakin' amazing! The only unamazing thing about the ordeal was me not getting the damned e-mail informing me that you posted it! So now what? Start updating more! (lol, I know we're all busy at this time of year, but we're ALWAYS busy)

sincerely: Me, since u know who i am(XD im talking to u now).

PS. And practice that shoe channeling, once cheerleading is over, we'll have to find those boys a new sport for the fall. *winks* then we get the amazing shirtless hockey season!

PPS. ReDnEcK cHeErLeAdInG tEaMs RoCk!

duh...

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that was a good piece of work...and it was quiet a change too and yeah i liked it

my conscience: of course u gotta like it! she's one of your fav.

continue writing this way plz _ (not that your stories are bad...they rock!)