can't take it any more speed things up it's so boring

make it longer. it's to short. i won't review again until your finished

kyyyyyyyyyyyyyaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa!XD

me:*sobs*that*gasp*was so sweet!

kish:its just a story!stop crying ya freak!OW!

me:THAT WAS THE SWEETEST ENDING EVA SO DONT YOU

F****** TELL ME TO STOP CRYING!

kish:*slowley backs away*...ok...*cowers in corner*dahm she hits hard.

Okay confusion... Who broke down into tears here? Ichigo or Kisshu? I was lost there...

PAI YOU IDIOT! YOU ARE VERY CRUEL, PAI-SAN!

w0w! Great! Sad! Original! These are the things it is! But...you forget to put I'm like, Capital I, (') and then small m.

If you put im, your really saying butter in Irish. Fact. Look it up.

‘ Kish im busy deep-blue is growing impatient…’

‘ Kish (butter) busy deep-blue is growing impatient…’

Doesn't make sense, does it? Thanks, and it IS original. People go for Kish's past. but Pai and Tart need some love too!

Aww, what about Retasu's reponse? My favourite line was 'the man who embraced blood like a lover and relished power like a god'. It's more descriptive than a paragraph of mines alone. Shame it's ended. As much as I'd like a sequel, I advise you not to. -.- I've noticed how sequels in books and movies have always gone crap... don't let your story fall into that long line too...

Like it? I LOVED IT! IT WAS AWESOME! AND I LOVED THE ROMANTIC PARTS IT WAS THE BEST! IM JUST SAD IT ENDED! I WANNA READ IT OVER AGAIN!

“Onee-chan.i’m sorry…when you were chosen for the mission I was encouraging to you and I was excited for you as well. Instead of telling you how I really felt I faked happiness but really I was scared! I couldn’t imagine life without you Pai. I had always relied on you for everything after our parents died thought you would notice my feelings but you left me anyway not even bothering to ask me one more time if I was okay! As you left I had to run out to see you. You didn’t even move. PAI! WHY DIDN’T YOU TAKE ME WITH YOU!”He shouted out his last sentence the force of his pain ringing through my ears. I lay lettuce down gently and walked towards him and lay my hand on his head.

XDD Sorry, but onee-chan is sister. XD Onii-chan (or san or whatever) is brother. Older brother. Owo If you're saying little brother, I think it's ototo.

By the way, this is LoliShoji. I just changed my username. 8D

*sqeuals* SO KAWAII! - Aww, poor Teru D The ending was so cute! -

By reading all of your chapters I can see the big improvements from the first to the last. I love how you describe everyone and Pai and Retasu sound very much in character. Let's hope you do finish before the end of the month, ne?

Update soon! _

AW IT WAS GETTING GOOD! CAN''T WAIT TIL THE NEXT CHAPTER THIS IS GOOD STUFF! 0

YAY! An update!

Aww, he said thank you to Lettuce! YAY! Aww, nuu last chapter next, D Oh well,

Yay!I'm so glad you decided to finish! Can;t wait til the next chapter! Pai just listen! And Lettuce make him understand just don;t hurt him too much k!