That was great, but I don't know what the words that are in itallics are... the ones that go "... Happy birthday!" I don't know what that's about. But that was a great fanfiction.

Oh man, I am in love with the feel of this. It's a perfect snapshot into their everyday lives; while in the context of a videogame it's hard to get that idea across, you've conveyed it very well here. I adore the barrel roll line, especially; it made me grin. Fox's interaction with his other teammates is precious; it all feels natural. I liked the wordplay with "graying hare" with Peppy, too, haha. NICE. You even had me nervous when Falco was merging! (Merging in regular car-traffic is bad enough; I can't imagine merging in a spaceship.) The communications-chatter on Corneria was a nice touch, too; they were well-written snippets.

Anyway, I thoroughly enjoyed this. You did a great job. :3

Wow, this definitely catches my eye. Not enough for me to point out some pointers, so I'll keep an eye on this.

Grade: B

This is pretty good! I'm surprised it only got one review so far!

You have a pretty good storyline going here, and I'm sure as you progress with it, it'll get better! Awesome job!

V-Starfox

Very, very good story. Keep it up- I don't give if you have no reviews, keep working! This story is very, very good. Does it lead up to Sauria?