I was really interested in reading this based on the summary, but the constant misspellings are making my head hurt.

Wormtail, not tongue. Also scourgify is the spell. And would, not whould. Stan Shunpike is the conductor of the Knight Bus and Ernie is the driver.

great story will there be another

Wow Harry your son is not even a minute old and already you want another one

Почему не на русском?

Stan Shunpike and Ernie. Also that creepy head but I'm almost positive he's never given a name. Stan is the acne ridden conductor. Ernie is the white haired driver

Very well written. maybe you should forget about math and become a writer? well done!

This is a great story but cannot you get a beta because there are quite a few mistakes and it interrupts with the flow of the story, plus it makes it hard to read as one must try and understand what word you had really wanted to use. Keep up the writing-I enjoy your character-Snape's daughter

I like your plot, I really do. The problem is your grammar. Your spelling and usage needs a lot of work. It would also do not to rush your story too much and slow down and add detail. All in one chapter we've seen Harry get beaten by his uncle, catch a Knight bus, go into Diagon Alley, be found by Severus, Go to Severus' house, meet his daughter AND be healed (though not completely). All of that should have been at least two and a half or three chapters. I think a beta would help make this better. It's hard to read past the first chapter because the spelling is annoying, as well as the usage of words and poor vocabulary.

I don't mean to 'flame' you, but it takes but a moment to go over your spelling mistakes (at least) before posting your story. The fact that that did not happen shows you have not enough appreciation toward your readers.

I'm bordering on disrespect I suppose, so I will stop here.

Have a great day.

they are like rabbits

I dont mean to be rude but you NEED to use periods more often! you use "and" instead of a period and it's really annoying! Also you should use abreveations (I spelt that wrong) to make the characters more realistic, like "it's" instead of "it is". But the periods are the main thing. You put a period everytime you stop for a breath here's an example:

(this is the origonal paragraph) Next day, Angela arrived at the dinner table early and there was Dumbledore waiting for them patiently and she went near him and passed him the list of books for each year level and Albus understood that she had met her father in Diagon Alley and had told her and that she accepted... Angela told him also what name she was going to use on hogwarts and Albus made no commnt and accepted it as it was a family talk.

(Here is the paragraph etited) The next day, Angela arrived at the dinner table early. Dumbledore was waiting for them patiently, she walked up to him and passed him the list of books for each year level. Albus had understood that she had met her father in Diagon Alley. He guessed that Severus must have told her about the job and that she was acceptpting. Angela also told him what name she was going to use at hogwarts. Albus made no commnt and had accepted it as it was a family desition.

This probobly isnt the best edit but you should get the idea. Also please don't ake this as a flame, it's not, it's just me trying to help you with your writing. (lol this is the logst review I've ever writen XD)

griffen and snake ! that was a nice shock

I am hoping that English is not your first language and not that you pay soo little attention to spelling and grammer.

Maybe you could go back and edit your mistakes.

I don't care if you see this as a flame because it's not like I am saying, 'This story sucks and so does your writing!' I am actually just telling you to pay more attention!

Um... good plott, but... your spelling/grammer are terrible. Just so ya know. (I suck at spelling too though haha) Proof reading aloud helps. :)

WHY ON EARTH DIDN'T YOU HAVE SIRIUS IN THAT SCENE! THAT'S WHAT I WAS WAITING FOR! Other than that totally awesome story!