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I burst out laughing when the last scene cut to Lilith and Gilgamesh commenting on what was unfolding between Sarah and Jareth. The two youths have no true privacy hahaha~ but I am happy that Lilith doesn't mind their union. It's always great to have a parent's approval of your relationship. Though Jareth doesn't actually know it lol

Also, how cool is it to have the librarian be so knowledgeable that he can help Riha with Fae-related things? Other people would find her ridiculous, but he was willing to help. Nice. :)

I remember that one chapter where Toby was humming a familiar tune, and is doing it again with the same song I assume. I had thought perhaps it was the tune of Magic Dance since that's the one Jareth had sung to him, but I also wondered if it was As the World Falls Down, since Lilith and Gilgamesh mentioned it being the Fae Song. I'm starting to think its the latter... Also, I love how you're making this story bigger than just Sarah and Jareth's love - you're also including Toby in this, and I find it quite exciting! It's really endearing to see just how attached Jareth had grown to the baby. I'm assuming he wanted Toby to be his heir as Goblin King. Oh, and just when I was about to think, "When we were going to see Gilgamesh and Lilith again?" I see Lilith's name in the text and it makes me smile. That was great haha~ Ah, and I've wanted to mention this earlier - I really like the friendship Conner and Jareth have. I like how Conner kind of looks up to him. :)

Megan, Megan, Megan... It's sounds like such a Mean Girl's kind of name, it really fits her. Glad the girls got justice and we've got one minion out of the way. Hooray for Sarah's dad being a top-notch lawyer! And the police chief being negotiable with him. Man I'm really hoping karma can get a direct hit on Megan soon...

Oh my, this wasn't what I expected as Sarah and Jareth's first base. Don't take this the wrong way, but I... I couldn't take it seriously... because it all seemed so... humorous? I was squealing, but with a different feeling. With Sarah playing the part of a cat, and Jareth playing along... I couldn't... I couldn't help but feel like a child who was watching her parents flirt with each other. I felt that kind of embarrassed feeling. Also, I would have thought Sarah would be more guarded against Jareth, but I guess the occasion causes her to feel like she can have some liberty with him. And the constant nicknames he was giving her... If Hog was there, there's no doubt he'd probably roll his eyes and say, "Yer bein' overkill Jareth" while Didymus and Ludo would probably be snickering, and I feel like I'd be both parties haha~ This chapter wasn't bad, it was a corny kind of cute. And I do admire you for straying away from the typical costumes/guises we'd expect Jareth and Sarah to be in, like when Sarah forwent using a fairy costume, and how Jareth's a biker. I think that's creative. :)

Ah, and I'm so glad Sarah is finally on good terms with her father. This is the first time I've come across a story where Sarah is on amicable terms with all of her family members. It's such a nice feeling!

Once again I was completely over the moon with the last scene! I'm smiling and squealing yet again! But why? I've not reacted like this in a Labyrinth fanfic so continuously chapter after chapter. Is it because it's simply in the flirtation stage? In reality this stuff does get the heart beating super fast. Well, a lot of romantic stuff does, but for some reason the way you write out Sarah and Jareth's interactions makes me feel especially bubbly. I think that this is such a fascinating way to set them up. Often times, these two are pitted where either Sarah despises Jareth, or Jareth is vengeful against Sarah, or they're at each other's throat at the same time. I do like these scenarios to an extent, because there's a slow burn aspect to them, but your story so far also has me anticipating for more. Here it's like we're having two strangers fall in love, instead of the typical enemies-to-lovers (but we the audience know otherwise muahahaha). How great is it, to have these two people who love-hated each other be given a chance to fall in love with each other again without the spite (for now)? UGH I'M LIVING FOR IT.

And another thing! I'm a complete stranger to these Irish pagan practices, so it's interesting to be given insight through your story.

I was so giddy throughout this chapter! Gosh every time Sarah and Jareth interact it puts such a big smile to my face and I start squealing. I love how you're building up their encounters so far. I also loved the bits of humor you threw in with dialogue between Lilith and Gilgamesh, and Hoggle and Jareth. It's nice to see Jareth not purposefully mispronouncing Hoggle's name this time around, granted he isn't truly himself for the time being. Seriously, you made me laugh with Hog's insistent warnings to Jareth. I do wonder though, the three companions are supposed to be helping Jareth right? I wonder why Hoggle keeps trying to dissuade Jareth from making advances then...he probably wants Jareth to be more subtle? Less... Predatory? I'm wondering how old this Aboveground Jareth is. I'm guessing Gilgamesh magicked him to appear in his twenties, so I'm taking pleasure in imagining Jareth with a 20-28 year old David Bowie face. ;)

Oh gosh oh gosh the last scene had me squealing! I'm so excited for what's to come!

I like how even in the Aboveground, peculiar occurrences can seem magical (or perhaps even are!) like Sarah meeting Riha and finding out they're actually kin, Sarah getting the studio, and all this Irish folklore stuff that Sarah seems to be inadvertently getting into. I'm also wondering if the artist that previously inhabited Sarah's studio will make an appearance and have some impact in the story. I'm making a hunch that this artist might actually be an Underground dweller hmm...

The only thing I wish we had in this chapter and maybe even the last one is imagery of how Gilgamesh was working his magic to transform Jareth and company. It would have been nice to imagine Gilgamesh's Magic in the works.

However! You did well in describing the town of Sarah's school. I had fun imagining that, as I love the atmosphere of quaint towns in the first place. :)

Man, when Karen was giving Robert a taste of her mind, I was cheering once again. Seriously, go Karen! She such an MVP in this story.

And holy shucks what a revelation! If Gilgamesh didn't mention it, I would have never thought Sarah reciprocated Jareth's feelings! Based on the dialogue from the final scene of this chapter, I would have thought Sarah loathed Jareth instead. Seriously, I gasped when I read what Gilgamesh said and for a second was just like, "What? No way! Whaaaaat?" My heart swelled. I really loved that part.

Oh wow what an intriguing world you're creating! I love how you've given us a mother for Jareth who cares for him deeply, how you've brought in an individual of legend, and make it known that other characters of myth and legend exist in your story. I remember watching an interview of David Bowie where he states that Jareth is just a really big kid, and I really see it being true here. How humorous, but endearing it is to be reminded that every man is still a child when put beside his mother. I love this theme of motherly care by the way. And how you twist the trope of doting father/evil step-mother and make it that Karen is a caring step-mother and the father is the one you get irritated at for his behavior towards his own daughter. Makes me really, really like Karen, and really, really dislike Robert. I'm like "Go Karen!" as she's trying her best to make Sarah feel better.

Oh, and one last thing about the transitions. Now that I think about it, you don't have to provide context or whatever, like I suggested. Simply putting section breaks would be good enough. Not saying you have to though; I understand you wouldn't want to go through the hassle of putting lines in each chapter, but perhaps for future works you can consider it.

Gosh I feel sorry for both Jareth and Sarah. I understand why the parents are doing what they're doing to Sarah, but it feels like the dad is doing it out of contempt for her, rather than love. Like he just wants her as far away from his new family as possible. It makes me dislike him. Karen's more likeable here because you can see the concern she has over Sarah's well being.

As for Jareth, the poor thing... He exhibited a heartbroken expression in the movie when he was rejected, so I think it is a fitting scenario for him to be so low-spirited as in this story. I like how he has compassion for Toby, since he did spend more time with the baby than with Sarah. It's clear he had an attachment to the baby in the movie and it's nice how it's acknowledged in this story. Oh, I like that parallelism in the line he said, "Everything's... dancing..." just like what Sarah said after she'd eaten the peach. :)

If there is one thing to critique about the writing style, it's the transitions. The transition from one character to the other's perspective is a bit abrupt. As I was reading I was like, "Oh, okay we're reading about this person now." I had to switch perspectives in my head super fast, and it sort of messes with the flow of my imagination as I'm reading. It'd be nice if you could provide some context when moving on to another character, such as a description of what they're doing prior to the dialogue they're saying. Other than that, everything else was smooth sailing.

I hope one of the people who gave them a ride catches the little ***** as she's leaving. Not only is she trespassing but she has two counts of attempted murder and probably a ton more once Sarah's Dad is done.

You know what the normal, level headed response to hearing your child resents a younger family member? Spending time with them! The logical solution would be for her father to spend a couple of hours a week with her and only her. No Karen, no Toby, no work or anything that would distract him from his Daughter.
The Doctor told them that too... actually, I'm surprised the Dr DeCaro hasn't told them they are making the problem worse. At this rate she's not going to graduate because she has pretty much no familial comfort.
I like that Toby is unhappy that Sarah can't even give him a hug anymore. He should be around 4 by now and probably loves his sister to bits since they had two years to grow closer before she went to see the doctor.
(121 is 4, assuming Toby was 1 when he was wished away, 2 years passed before Sarah went to see a Doctor about her Nightmares and 1 year has passed since she started Boarding school. He could be younger or older depending on how old he was when he was wished away though)

What is Riha's illness? I keep wondering about it.

Quite the tale. Jareth as always is enticing, beguiling, and makes you want to believe in the fantastic. Thank you. Thank you for giving us a small peak into the fantasy.