I love it this is great so keep going and good luck my friend.

... and you stop it there?

I really enjoy your story. It is very creative. I do hope you will continue it some time soon.

ye it was a good idea to send them after naruto to make some more action.

But can you explain for what reason that 8th tailed beast wanted sasuke back in time,,or are you yust to lazy to cower that area?

How about pairing him up with someone OOC you create,

wow took long enough man...

I think Kagome/Naruto is a good idea. Shippo Out!

Very good chapter. I look forward to reading what happens in your next one.

narukago

Cool chappy. One issue is that you changed between 3rd person and first person randomly.

good.

this story is pretty good the only problem i have is sakura SURE you can pull off the 'i dont care what happends to naruto thing in the normal naruto but in shippuden she is more neutral to him like 'dammit without naruto here itll be harder to get sasuke back'.

and for kakashi the same applies, in the normal version its like 'sasuke will always be facing tougher oppenents than naruto so i have to prepare him' and for shippuden you can make it like 'i have to prepare the dobe to bring sasuke back at whatever cost'

I'm pretty sure you spelt Jiraiya right, but it's 'Pein' not 'Pain'

cool story plz continue

unless you absalutly have too and you're are literaly dying to plz plz don't kill jiriaya he is awesome in my opion

i know hows ya feel man or woman idk