That was not what I expected and though I'm not sure how I feel about it I did like it. I enjoyed the first person point of view; it's not often enough that authors take advantage of the powerful perspective. "I" is a very strong preposition. (At least I think it's a preposition...?) Anyhow, I think my only qualm is that the transition between Jack and Linda only made me wonder who was talking now... I suppose that was partly the point, but still I'm not sure that it couldn't have been clearer somehow. And though I don't like the idea of Jack having a 'hang-out-and-drink' place, especially one that he frequents enough that he is known - I do understand it's purpose for your story. Overall, this was refreshing - Thanks.

Cheers Jen

Nice perspective. And I like how the end *didn't* work out for him. It would have been easy to go "they ride off into the night together" but it wouldn't have been nearly as interesting.

Wow, that was angsty but so brilliant. You portrayed Jack's feelings over the Sam/pete situation really well.

We can pair Jack up with anyone, but eventually we all know they'll see through it, and tell him the right way.

Excellent story. I really enjoyed it.

Damn. That's one fine story. Probably the best one I've read in a few days. So Jack. I liked Linda. I like strong smart people like her. Brilliant idea too. Where do you come up with them? So random, but so... fitting, I think is the word. I dunno. I just thought I'd review since I havent in a while. D

kara

That sure nails Jack's character and inner voice on the mark. Another great capture of the Jack no one gets to see or hear, and it's well drawn. Well done angst. But hey, Sam dumped whosit, so what'd he think then? Love the story, thanks for sharing.

Good one! Begs for another part, though? ;-)

How very sad.

Another great story. Very sad, heartbreaking really. Liked Linda and am so glad she saw Jack's problem.

Not sure i agree with the light of the torch growing dimmer or the bond stretching thin though.

very nicely done. Right on target. Thanks for sharing

A lovely reflection of that sad time ... But there will be happier moments to come, won't there?