Oh j'aurai aimé voir une suite ton histoire est tellement bien. En tout cas bravo je te félicite j'ai tellement adoré la lire ! Tu mérites beaucoup de commentaire. Bisous

Moooooh pauvre Luffy ... mais non il n'est jamais trop tard pas vrai ?

J'adore vraiment ton histoire, elle est jolie. Je prend du plaisir à la lire

La paure Nami du coup elle est coincée et ne peut pas partir. Il va falloir quelle sauve son capitaine ! Je trouve ça beau la façon dont elle décrit Luffy, son sourire et ses épaules droites. Tu écris vraiment très bien bravo

Coucou, bien que cette histoire date je tiens quand même à la commenter parce que tu écris très bien. On ne s'ennuit pas quand tu lis ce qui est le problème de beaucoup d'histoire, qui ont trop de lignes qui ne servent à rien. J'ai trouvé Luffy absolument adorable ( et bien c'est ce qu'il est ) C'est vrai que Nami au début sourit mais ses yeux ne suivent jamais ... et on peut le comprend quand on apprend finalement sa terrible histoire. Luffy lui a rendu son vrai sourire c'est pourquoi j'aime beaucoup ton histoire et je m'empresse de lire la suite

Awe, I really liked this story! Nobody was out of character, which is really good! I like how it ended too, with Luffy giving her a kiss om the cheek and Nami fixing Zoro's blanket, as well as some loose strands of Usopp's hair. Very adorable.

Aw, the whole story was just very sweet

It was definetly a suiting adventure for them to have before the Arlong Arc. One thing that did annoy me about the arc is how during Nami's flashbacks of the times she had with the strawhats, we hadn't actually seen any of it. Seeing that made me consider how there may be a whole strain of little 'episodes' inbetween each arc(Buggy, Usopp's arc and then Baratie) that we haven't been aware of. Otherwise, for all we knew, Nami had only just joined the crew for about 25 episodes by the time she betrayed everyone.

Amazing story! I also loved the concept you had with the mirror, and back in the last chapter or so, I had noticed Luffy not being affected by it and laughed at that. Though, some transitions from illusion to reality were slightly confusing. It took me a couple moments to realize that the dead Luffy at the platform was just an hallucination and not Luffy under the spell of the mirror himself.

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I can only imagine how embarassed she would be to realize she had said that to him, even in a sleepy stupor. Great story, Alastair, as usual.

That mirror sounds pretty dangerous. I wonder how Luffy could carry on a conversation with himself?

People in positions of power can seldom be trusted, which it seems is a thought that made it into your story.

The little bits about Nami's heart are quite good, though it took me a little bit of thinking to understand it. I am jealous of your ability to be so descriptive in your writing. Great stuff as usual.

Shame for Nami to get suckered into staying by Luffy being in mortal danger. Arlong really had a big influence on her, and one can only imagine what she might be like had she never met Luffy.

Luffy is always so positive, even when it seems strange. Love the story so far.

Wha! What agreat story! Ive also read a few others of yours. They're really good! Keep up the amazeing writeing! -

Marine Luffy. Coincidentally, I thought of an idea of a AU where Luffy was a Marine and yet he still yearns to be a Pirate. But man, an AU like that would be the hardest to write and it would have to be LuNa in my view, since it's about Luffy and none of the guys are gay, cuz if they were, Oda would lose lots of fans quick and easy. And I can't see any of them being homos so yeah, an AU about Marine Luffy would definitely be hard.

I really liked that dream of Nami's baby. I was rooting for him/her to be Luffy's, which is no surprise lol. Hahahaha, this was great. Oh yeah, the comment referring to the Marine Luffy idea on this review, I meant to put it on the chapter that showed his mirror-self as a Marine but I forgot? It's always a pleasure to read fics by you and that's the whole truth.