Yea you need to learn to write a story not a cartoon short. Needs a lot of work. Anbu do NOT show the mask in public even to other Anbu. They do not talk about it in public. No mission would last for 2 years unless it was a spy mission and that is not Naruto at all.

Kill yourself, pathetic virgin.

Sakura is the hottest in the manga and ALL the guys want her. No one wants Hinata cause she is ugly and fat. Kishi said it himself

So great, you're talented !

"...I think I'm gonna take you shopping for a totally new outfit!"
Uhmm... I though Naruto was supposed to be her lover, not her gay best friend... o_

Yeah, uhmm... I'm done.. with this.. Sorry. Naruto is way to feminine for my liking. Plus this story seems more focused on the fashion than on something interesting. :/

Hinata definitely OOC. she's like SOOC (super out of character) .O

I think it's kind of awkward. It's got a good plot at first, but then you start talking about outfits... WTF?

And the jutsus are weak; I mean she's a freaking ANBU. So is Naruto. They should have way beaster moves then mere clone jutsus and transparency/transportation techniques. You also have her do "Kurenai's Jutsu"... it would've helped if you actually researched what that jutsu might be called, and also it would be really weird if Hinata could do that kind of jutsu in the first place.

Also, Hinata's totally OOC. Aside from the blushing habit, there's no twiddling her pointer fingers or even the most obvious, THE STUTTERING.

And since when has Hinata had baby fat... o_e I mean really. Even when she was a kid, she was super skinny... And her chest were already kind of huge during the chunin exams.

I'm sorry for the rant. :/ Lol. :D I'm excited to push forward though.

the 7 tails thing was iffy but other then that gj

Lol that not what your hormones are telling me

not bad but there are several problems. one, if hinata was a jinchuriki, she would never have taken so much damage from sakura, 2 there is no 7 tailed cat, there is only the Nibi no Nekomata (2 tailed cat) and the Shichibi no Kaku (7 tailed badger), 3, all jinchurikis have 2 things in common, they have demons inside of them and the all have blood lust, hinata doesn't have it. 4, u make both sakura and hinata so bitch like

wow this is awesome! its like a highschool/college world of naruto

great story, i loved their personalities and i'm glad hinata was ok.

the 7 tailed cat thing was a nice surprise w

very much enjoyed reading this

these too are so cute!

love the closeness they have. it's just too cute!

i so wish i could see these two act like this in the anime w

i love stories where the kyuubi can tell what naruto feels and suggest he mates with her :D

that kyuubi always tells it like it is XD

I loved the story so much! The cupid thing at the end brought me to tears! I love you thank you for the upload! Love NaruHina!

I know im being a bit of a dick here but could you at least try to be a little more eloquent? Other than that its a good story

YAY YAY YAY!

I love NaruHina!

so asome!