yep your story definitely sucks now.

so now even Arya is a lap dog for Nasuada?

WHY DO YOU KEEP RUINING YOUR STORY?! LIKE HONESTLY, EVERY TIME I READ A CHAPTER I HATE THIS STORY MORE AND MORE! I DON'T EVEN KNOW WHY I KEEP READING IT

yep, definitely ruined your story by having Eragons and Saphiras connection cut off. And really, it wasn't even him who did it. You just had trianna come and do something in seconds and it was finished. Your story is stupid.

your story gets worse and worse as each chapter goes by.

so, this girl can easily defeat murtagh. Murtagh was easily battling 3 elves by himself, including eragon . Conclusion, Eragon is very weak in this story. His power is sufficiently lower then others.

the egg being with the ra'zac is the most stupid idea ever. Galbortorix doesn't even like the ra'zac and yet he gives them the egg to hide. Yes, another well thought out idea.

yes, 3 elves cannot not do anything to determine that another powerful mind is in their presence into their at sword point. It just makes so much sense!

you should actually right a plan before writing, you kept contradicting yourself, you said you put her down and put an illusion on her, then later the slavers see her? and then after that you put her down again? Yousaid you were holding her with your hand around her waist then said you were using magic , which is it? also eragon is never reffered too as rider from the narrator. BAD

Dude you have to write a sequel to this...

FREAKING awesome story! :D

You can't just throw in a random F-Bomb. Besides, if you were gonna throw it in, you should have earlier.

Let Eragon be happy for once!

Elva? Nice story twist.

You had better not have Arya and Murtagh get together!