i hope you see this review or notification i really love your fic probably the sweetest ive read i really hope that after 12 years you do come back to this

... Wow. Holy shit. Didn't know it was even possible to be a worse father than Gendo. I knew Asuka's father was... atrocious, but, you made me LIKE Gendo! This story is one hell of a ride, jeez. I would've loved if Shinji just stood there coldly and put lead between Erik's and "Mrs. Soryu's" eyes.

What's worse? A father who gladly manipulates and uses the people around him, including his own family, or a father who drove his former wife into commiting suicide, fooling around with Kyoko's doctor WHILE ASUKA, A 4 YEAR OLD IS HEARING, happily left Asuka, only to return years later to shoot her fiancée, hurt and damage his own daughter both physically and verbally, and then when "Mrs. Soryu" gets shoot and gets strangled himself, still doesn't give up but gets his ass beaten in the most "don't talk to me or my son, EVER AGAIN" moment by GENDO HIMSELF.

Oh, and worst of all, he committed the worst, most unholy sin that will send him to the 9th circle of hell:

TAX FRAUD.

I'm proud of Gendo, being the (next) worst father and best father at the same time, even if he's still planning his own Third Impact. Then I remembered that SEELE's chairmen got shot by my man Kaji and realized "Oh no... Gendo is REALLY powerful now. He basically killed the king and queen and got all the pawns on his side in chess."

I wonder what the next chapters will be like. Don't know if you can top the fight between the Soryus and the dysfunctional family.

Holy shit, and all THAT was just CHAPTER ONE?!

This is the best thing I've ever laid my eyes upon! Daaaammn! I was expecting it to be much darker (DISCLAIMER: In general. The whole uhhh, r*** thing is still dark as hell, and the whole "Asuka being bullied mood swings etc." situation broke my heart.)

This Shinji blew me out of the water. Well, the entire first chapter blew me out of the water. My favorite side of Shinji is the "father" side that is rarely seen in fanfiction. The only other fanfictions with that side of him is AFTER IMPACT and The Second Try, and I adore and love both of those.

I don't care if it's waaayy OOC, it just makes it better, not worse!

Also the foot massage part reminds of a moment in The Second Try where the lines from Asuka makes you believe they're... screwing around but then reveals Shinji is just really good at massaging. Here it's even better as the "build-up" is a little longer and the "punchline" better.

Everytime I find a critique that is constructive or not nitpicking, I quickly shrug it off, telling myself it just makes the chapter even better.

Love it.

Pretty much everyone and their mother knows this is garbage, the "WAFF" isn't even good, the characters personality get flipped, for no reason other than "Man up" it's like saying "Just be confident." Anyway why would Ritsuko even say to her face, "You're getting an abortion," sucks major ass.

please continue immediately, this is very good. continue until finished

Holy Jesus what did I just read

A decent WAFF, but a bit too OOC. Shinji and Rei being siblings is also good, and the writing is decent, but I wish Asuka and Shinji’s dynamic wasn’t as different from the original series. Seeing a manly shinji and a domesticated Asuka is very weird, and not always in a good way.
P.S. Asuka’s dad is American, and would go by Langley unless he took his wife’s name.

I like how you made Gendo a good guy, but still kept him remotely in character.

Top Gun? More like GOD YES!

I do hope you plan on finishing this, it's really good

Please finish this someday

This chapter alone is great. It's everything one fanfiction should be but in chapter form and I still have more to go.

This fic was rushed. As where it's characters.

Will who the biological father was ever become relevant?

This fanfiction is defective to change without any explanation or reason Asuka and Shinji temperament, both having a much stronger relationship. To believe both like each other but shinji of anguish and Asuka's pride prevent that approach, even if they suffer from it.
I could have written a slower history and more develop their character instead of the shinji readily have her request to marry. The best way to evolve their character is through failure and its falls. Shinji and Asuka placing falling several times and learning from the pain of his frustration to grow and become better people.
The Asuka could have been involved with some guy she apparently thinks better than shinji and its level for the time to end up pregnant be abandoned, Asuka realize that she can not do it alone, she depends on others, it is isolated not wanting anyone else, but only get pain of loneliness. The point would be that it realizing that nothing can do it alone and needs of others, you will see that only shinji cared about her.
The shinji could have evolved in the direction that feels despised and resented it. Resolve grow as a person, never to be neglected. Resolve then change your life for the better. He gets involved with another girl and realizes that it is not happy and misses Asuka.
Best way to develop the plot would be through the obstacles that would allow the actors to rethink their lives and review your mistakes.