After years long... I suddenly had the urge to find some ToTA fic that has AschLuke essence, and after browsing this is the 1st i am reading.. And now i am LOVING ITTTTT GAHHHH
Arigathanks for writing tis beauty author-san!

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awwww so sweeet...I love Luke Headaches its so damn cute! *sadist smile*

Well when it comes to Asche it's kinda hard to wright a romance fanfic without making him ooc so it's totally understandable.

Honestly, it's weird to see Asch calling Luke with "Luke". :/

Anyway, why do you skip the raep-scene? #SHOT

But, I'm still love it. ;) #pervysmirk

["Who's there?" Luke turns around in an instance at the sound, when he notices a flash of red passes by. "That's…"]

Holy crap, it's a cardinal. Or Asch. Or Axel. Something red. D:

[Asch plans to leave immediately when he accidentally step on a branch. 'Dammit!']

Gotta love it when you are trying (unsuccessfully) to be stealthy. Oh well. Running!

["And don't get me wrong! I'm not here because I'm worried about you or something!"

Silence.]

*Suspicious glace*

...Suuuuure...

[Luke is acting so…cute?]

He what now?

*Backs away* o_o

[until he notices a monster is preparing to leap onto Luke from a high spot.]

Ninja monster?

[On the clothing are some leaves and fruits. Luke grabs two stones,]

Ahhhhhhh! Abuse!

[as he puts the leaves on the big stones and grinds it with the smaller one.]

Oh. Uh...

[You think you are not supposed to exist?]

Not that Roxas talk again! :(

["And I love you too, Asch."]

Daaaaaw. :D

Ahaha, even though he's out of character, this was a sweet fic. . Great job.

Hi there!

Kya!

I like this fic!

It's cute!

Na, i want ya to be my friend.

I'm Asch in friendster acc.

If ya wanna be friends with me too ne!

There!

Hihi!

Keep up the good work ne!

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Ok, first of all I liked the story. It was nicely written and the interaction between the two flowed at a natural pace for a oneshot. However, some of the grammar and use of past/present tense was a little off. I suggest having a beta reader review it before you post. (Please don't take offense, your writing is good but having someone look it over beforehand could make it even better.) Keep up the good work!

Hello!I love your fic!You are aslasse Tasartir feom deviantart and youtube right? Keep up the good work!_

Aww, so cute and nice plot. Lol, Asch is a stalker now?

i loved it

love the story its so well written!

Oh soo nice :3 I looved this it was so cute x3 awesomely awesome job!

I love your story! I felt like going around doing the fangirl scream after reading! Kyah!