Many times, your in between A/n's made me think the chappie was over as I read this in the app...Please don't do in between a/n's

And very much once again, the plot gets ruined by bad grammar. I can understand if you are multilingual or too lazy to correct it but PLEASE! at least get a beta.

I have to admit, the idea of this story is very interesting, the plot could be more dramatic and solid but i guess this is okay too. It has enough angst that made me cry-i literally cried, really! Your plot is quite good- but your author notes ruined the moments plenty of time, downright annoying. Do you know it is against the rule to do that?

Idk why you stop getting your chapters betaed after the first few ones but it'd be nice if you had continued it. I totally understand if English isn't your first and you're a multilingual because I am too the same. It was brave and good for you to try to write despite that.

Oh well. You've managed to complete it. Thankfully and I'm grateful you shared your creativity with us readers. It was nice and heartfelt. Thank you for writing this fic the best you could. All the best for your future ones.

Aya wanderlust

Okaaay. Your story is really, reaally good but honestly, your authors notes in between are ruining the moments you'd written out nicely. Kindly remove them if possible. Please.

You suck at writing, there is literally no character development.

I totally agree with Gemini. Don't make it easy on Sasuke!

YOU know what? I am not letting this go. At least, AT LEAST put a sequel! Something! Because that cliffhanger man! This like Spiderman and Venom all over again: good with a bad ending and no sequel. Know what? I'll finish this myself.

Lumi, I'm thinking the same damn thing! Like where the hell is the love making?!

Kill him ,beat the living out of him!

I do love this a lot. Sure there are somethings I don't like but everything has at least one problem with them. Especially the professional stuff like books and movies. I think you did a really good job on this. Thanks for writing it.

Aw I really liked that story. Specially the reactions of people like Neji, Gaara, etc. Also that Sasuke changed his ways. The only thing that I wasn't that fond of is that the ending was a bit short to me but besides that I like the ending.

So KAWAII AT THE END!

GAAAAAA SO FRIGEN KAWAIIII

wait no yaoi ?
first u make naruto girly as fuck damn u even dressed him like a girl
secondly u make sasuke an asshole for no apparent reason the whole blaming naruto doesn't even makes sense, both of them had the mentality of a 9ord and then after all the bullshit just open his eyes? oh well no shit
u put romance in it I didn't see any romance there, just sasuke trying to rape naruto this story sucks in so many levels

OMFG I wanted to cry so badly I loved it