This was, hands down, the best fanfic I've ever read in my life. I can't even. It was amazingly written, and your storyline kept me freaking out from the first chapter until the end. I can't wait to read the sequel 33

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My guess is you aren't reading these reviews anymore, but iv'e become so addicted with your stories... well I had to say something.

Overall, I think you are a brilliant writer. Though there are flaws, I found this story more addicting and beautiful than any other published warcraft story. I didn't like "Stormrage" too much, the plot didn't get me like yours did. Bottom line, you can write beautifully and your plots are very clever, humorous, and original. I am truly hooked to your stories.

However, something that has been bothering me since the Romancer stories arose yet again in MLFMP. You seem to make the same kind of both female and male characters. The females are all indescribably beautiful and smart and deadly. Not to say they are a mary-sue, but it is incredibly annoying how girly they are. Part of what I love in warcraft series is how mature and powerful the women are. All of the women in your stories are powerful, but they have these absurd moments of girlishness that don't even really happen in real life. I love your stories to death, but when Saturna was at the ball and shrieked about her being Queen and what not... was nauseating. I saw how you tried to make her fangirl-isms become her flaw, but it was so... as if you couldn't figure out any other flaw to give her. I don't know if you plan to write more, but if you do, PLEASE do something different. Saturna was all too much like Wisthera or Opalbane, a hot sex kitten, who could 2 shot you, yet would scream and jump around and "playfully" slap their boyfriends when they said something offensive. It's all too familiar, all too high school. Anyway, I love love love your stories, you have a great talent. Keep writing!

I cannot express at how well written this story is. This story... is beautiful. Just... wow, I was crying and laughing throughout the entire story. Bravo, I haven't had a good read like this in a while, you did well with your original character. Now, I will proceed to stay up all night and read the sequal...

YC: This just keeps better and better!

My fav scene was prolly the whole announcement scene! ANd Illidan backing all this up *shakes head* too great!

Where should I begin? *thinks*

I really liked your story in the beginning [plus, the number of chapters and reviews instantly drew me to it ;]. You write beautifully, you have a way with portraying characters (I especially liked how you portrayed Kael'thas in the beginning) and describing situations, and I definitely think you can write truly awesome stuff. Not to mention that I liked how intricate the plot was and how there were several plots *within* the main plot.

Stil... as I read on, I gradually got... bored, as I couldn't shake the feeling that despite everything I just wrote, this was just another Mary Sue fanfic in the end. The plot itself converges in that direction, and Saturna's character doesn't help. She's insanely powerful, but at the same time absurdly immature, and that's quite irealistic (even for a fanfic). Her fangirl behavior eventually got on my nerves, too.

On the other hand, I loved how you portrayed Pyorin, Sunthraze and Fennore. *thumbs up*

Another thing that made me give up is that the plot got out of hand with each chapter. I don't think that *all* dungeon bosses in Outland would attend a ball - a "humanoids only" kind of thing would've made it a lot more plausibile (as opposed to mixing up various monsters, like the folks from the Coilfang dungeons, for intsance). Towards the final chapters, Illidan and Kael get *way* out of character - so much that the story becomes incongruous with the Warcraft 'lore' (or canon). I'm one to appreciate artistic liberties, but I think that this has gone a tad too far.

Finally, I found way too many "game terms" in the story (tank, wipe, raid, resurrection, even talking about percentages in the middle of a fight). That took away some of the pleasure of enjoying otherwise well-written fighting scenes. My biggest problem here could very well be introducing the concept of resurrection - if bringing back people from the dead would actually be possible aside from the game (talking about novels here, for instance), then Grom Hellscream or even Sylvannas Windrunner would be alive and well. When writing a story based on a game, it's important to not mix up the two. Reading some official Warcraft novel (especially Richard A. Knaak's) can help a lot with both character portrayal and writing in general.

Hope I didn't bore you too much, and I also hope this helps... a little ;

Hmm, I have mixed opinions about this story. I liked the plot a lot, and I liked the constantly shifting situation between Illidan and Kael'thas. It was interesting how they thought about each other, and how their relationship developed over the course of the story between Illidan's lies and Kael's compassion and desire to help. That was definitely my favorite part of the story.

I also got a kick out of the humor, especially the raiding parties, the Black Temple factions and the blood knights' quest for reputation, and the references to in-game characters in Shattrath, and all that. It's a clever nod to World of Warcraft players, and it was entertaining. D

But I thoroughly hate Saturna as a character. She's entirely inconsistent; she starts out as a complete Mary Sue, then spends the next 2/3 of the story as a childish, obsessive fangirl, with some minor attempt at trying to reconcile the two that I am not really buying. I think I would have found her a lot more tolerable if she had been portrayed as a mature, level-headed person all along. I am always pretty wary of original characters, and this is a pretty good example of the type I can't stand at all.

I'm not a bit fan of Kael'thas' characterization, either. The bit about his extreme addiction at the beginning was very interesting, but I have to agree with Ruzio02's review, in that it would have helped to see the transition, because he is a very different character between any sort of Blizzard canon and this story (and that's even taking into account that he changes dramatically between Frozen Throne and WoW). He, too, seemed pretty inconsistent here. First he's just an addict, then he starts fluctuating between being vicious and sadistic, and being completely whipped and trailing Saturna around like a puppy.

Overall, I thought it was a very creative story, and unexpectedly entertaining, but I didn't much like the characters because of their representation, and I'm not really a fan of the high school drama type aspects of the plot (though the rest of it was great).

You are a wonderful writer, though, and I'll definitely keep an eye on your stories, especially in case you end up writing more about Illidan and Kael as they're two of my favorites from the games.

Awesome story! I loved every moment of it! I'm off to read the next one.

First, before I begin I need to say that because this chapter is so long, I was only able to read about half of it before this "review".

Ahem...(LoL) Kael'thas, if I forget him in previous chapters, is actually likable here. He's silly and witty. Not particularily suave, but likable.

Taking his place on my aggro list is now Saturna. She's obviously been corrupted into the gold digger bitch who takes advantage of the "guy with money" who likes her.

I'm sorry Nate, you might as well start digging because you've been owned of a mary-sue. ;]

And no one, I mean NO ONE can survive that. BURST DAMAGE MUCH?

Hahahahahaha! What a sad story...

And good god Kael'thas reminds me of someone I know. Which is not a good thing...

And once again, poor Nate. If I was in his shoes I'd just stare and shake my head. He's surrounded by loonies.

By the way, I hate people to take advantage of their power to get what they want. (We all know Kael does this.)

Because nobility are all just little immature kids who cry when they don't get what they want...

But seriously, If I found myself in such a position over a girl/guy I 'd be like "Fuck, you want her that bad? Fine you big baby." xD

Ahahaha! Greedy, greedy Kael. He reminds me of those politicians that use fancy words to trick you. I can see how easy it is for him to act that way and get away with it.

Poor Nate didn't stand a chance against Kael who is just too OP.

I guarauntee that if Nate was the prince and could summon fiery pidgeons and blow people to kingdom come, Saturna would be all over 'im.

Unless...She's just in it for the looks, ;] Then who gives a damn, take em both.

Hahahaha! I can't read this story anymore..The writing is amazing and fun, the characters are silly and fun to read. But the way they think makes no sense to me.

The part where Nate asks Sat to marry him and she goes all emo likes it's a bad thing to her friends and they say that he's forcing to get a girl to marry her without consent? Lmao I thought I heard him clearly say that he only needed her okay. That sounds like he was asking not forcing.

And when he was going on a rant to Sat in the room about Kael being a jackass he didn't sound paranoid..Not in the slightest bit. In fact...'I' do that when I'm very ANGRY. Not scared. When someone's scared they don't growl about such things.

Uhm...another thing? What's there to be scared about? Kael is a dickhead who has no right to pretend he is the martyr with his pretteh girl snatched from him. As far as I've seen, Nate has done nothing spiteful as opposed to Kael'theass. (C'mon, SNEAK ATTACK STOMACH PUNCH BITCH! Is not a mature, gentlemanly way of handling this.)

And what happeded the the Kael that kept blowing Sat off? Oh, FUCK another guy is dating her. Quick, lemme change my tune!one!eleven1!1.

Lmao anyway...As a reviewer I have a right to say I'm moving on because this story (even though it's just a story) upsets me.

After all, stories are meant to spark emotion, and whichever this focusses on is beyond me because all I'm gettin' is frustration. :]

Peace

Wow... I'm sorry if the story is meant to portray him otherwise, but to me Kael'thas comes across as a fucking prick. He's an immature bastard that doesn't know what he wants and makes the worst decisions. And finally when he seems to be doing things for the right reason, It's not enough to help me forgive him. And then getting all childish over Sat and punching Nate kinda sucked. That just helped me decide that I dislike him absolutely. xD

(I'm not insulting your writing when I say this, I love your writing!)

But realistically, There's no way in hell Kael would be able to own someone like Nate without cheating. (Which I can see he did) And on top of it, it seemed he was proud he did so and that pissed me off.

Anyway...I understand that Kael, being a main character, can be hard to build. (Along with Sat) The supporting characters seemed much more consistant in their personality. (Personally, I found the Naga guards from previous chapters very amusing!) And characters such as Nate and Pyorin I really like for this.

Saturna was frustrating to me as I found myself worrying if she'd remain consistant and make up her mind. (This is fun sometimes...)I'd be thinking "Now why doesn't she say/do-(Something I would see a woman in her position doing)"

Of course...I know she's inexperienced...And I realise this is only fanfiction...So forgive me for going into such a long review! xD

I mean absolutely insult in this! I love your story! What is a review save what the reviewer thinks having read the story?

P.s - I love your writing style. :] Very smooth.

Friggin awesome story!

I absolutely love it!

You're a good author, mixing humor with emotion. I particularly like the part with Illidan and the mention of the phoenix towards the end. Now all I can think of is 'If you were Gay' from Avenue Q and a very scarred Skybender (a.k.a. Womanbender)

Skybender: O_o