Some spelling errors but great story telling

I’m glad I decided to re-read this. I’ve enjoyed it

One of the best stories ever. Started reading it when I was still a kid and finished it a few years ago. About to re-read this. Excited

please update again I would love to know what happens next

Interesting start

Pretty great story. I liked the explanation for Gohan's three personas. Cogratz. Too bad you stopped writing.

This was an amazing read! It's hard to find fics that are this long in general, but also keep true to the quality you presented in the first few chapters. I appreciated the fact that Gohan being the commander completely surprising me. I actually never saw it coming but thinking back on it, there were small hints here and there. Also I have never seen this level of bromance between Gohan and Sharperner before and I gotta say, I absolutely loved it. I think that in itself added stability to Gohan. I'm sorry to see this fic not get continued, but I understand that life gets in the way and how people comment get you down, but what you did write was amazing.

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Ugh. No I’m all done. This story continues to be more annoying than it’s worth. Once again I must point to the fact that you wrote that Gohan moved quick enough for people to not perceive them with their eyeballs yet you also say he could not save the day due to his weakness. Even if he could, say, not use that speed for a long amount of time, which wouldn’t make sense since Gohan described himself as feeling physically weak as opposed to sick or unwell like one would be when they have a cold, he could have still used his speed in spread out bursts.

Then the part with Videl meeting the Crime Lord was about as organic as plastic. There were a billion more interesting ways to set that scene up, but instead it was linked to the boring ass and utterly pointless CCDD thing.

I’m out.

Oh god, that was barf inducing, especially the cliche and boring diatribe the commander gave Videl.

You could have cut out the entire thing and just gotten to the part at the end of this chapter. Would have been far less of a waste of time. I’ll probbaly stop reading this soon, especially if this boring-ass CCDD thing becomes a regularity.

Ugh, not to mention all the stupid ass speeches that... we’ll yoke gave at some point or another. Goddamn, talk about monologuing that thinks it’s smarter than it is.

I know it’s absurdly pointless to review an old story, but this little arc is annoyingly boring. Why on earth would we give a single fuck about non-super powered enemies and good guys? It’s just boring. We know it won’t affect anything, it’s just inconsequential original world building.

And it’s not like Gohan as Saiyaman could not just save the day after he got out, after all he moved quickly enough that people where unable to see him move. It further adds to how pointless this entire thing is.

And what’s with the world? Where is Japan on the map of the dragonball world? Or France or China or India or Denmark for that matter? What country is King Furry the king of? Where is Mount Paozu? Where is Korin’s Tower and the Karinga Tribe? Where did the Red Ribbon Army operate?

This weird fusion of the real world and Dragonball’s world makes absolutely no sense with all the shit that goes down in Dragonball. You know, like dinosaurs and anthropomorphic animals being normal everyday occurrences.

please update again soon, I would like to know what happens next.

This CCDD shit is awful and is quickly ruining the story.

dis chapter doe

J'aime bien mais 3 personnalités ouah.
Maintenant ce que je trouve magnifique est que videl dans un sans à su que Gohan était à la fois sayaman et le commandant ce qui est bizarre car quand Gohan va chercher de l'aide il y a quelque derrière lui c'était qui ? Après cela aurait été intéressant de voir que la nouvelle soit lime et non Vicky.
J'aime bien vegeta avec son opinion sur Gohan mais Bulma à raison il n'a jamais eu une enfance normal enfin jusqu'à 4 ans et même il y avait chichi qui le bourreau le cerveau car quel enfant de 4 ans veut devenir ce qu'a dit Gohan,.
Mais que Gohan est plusieurs personnalités ily à une preuve c'est quand il est en ssj2 où il agit différents.

J'espère que tu va continuer car elle mérite une suite même si c'est i ans.