What a sweet story! I liked how you adapted the story in a believable way. All the main moments are there and the chase and misunderstanding between the two of them is there!
thank you very much for sharing!

SOOOOO Twilight

I absolutely loved this story! I'm a bit sad it ended and would've liked to keep reading forever, but apart from that you should be really proud of yourself.
Jack was an absolute horror, the worst I've ever seen his character, and I thought the original was bad, but I guess thats a sign of the changing times. At least Georgiana got her twins and learned a valuable lesson out of such an awful situation, best that can be said really.
I'm sooo glad that Charlotte ditched Colins, I mean what a prat! You know, I bet she'd have done the same in Pride and Prejudice, if it had been possible back in the 1800's. And I love how she ended up with Fitzwilliam, I've always liked that pairing.
I think your ending, despite being too soon, is adorable. It's one of the most unique wedding scenes I've ever read. I've read so many in different books and fan fiction stories that they kind of blur into one after a while, unless there's a jazzing up of the vows or something, but you've really put some humanity into it. Lizzie admitting to stumbling is just what I'd probably do, if I ever got married, which is highly unlikely. And the whole conversation over that guy with the heart problem was just right, I bet people really do such things under the cover of the waffle during a service. My mum said when she got married she was trying hard not to laugh because of an aunt whose singing could be heard over everyone else during a hymn.
Oh! And the court scene was perfect. I don't mean technically, I've no clue of how such things go, unless you count watching Ally McBeal, but Darcy really kicked ass, which is the important thing.
And the scene where Darcy saved Lizzie from those guys in New York was brilliant. I know it was based on something in Twilight, but it really fit in well with your story and it's a great scene for any story, Vampires or not. The dazzling smile is also from twilight, but I don't see why Darcy can't have it too, dazzling isn't exclusive and who knows, maybe Lizzie had read the book and couldn't help what came out of her mouth when drunk.
Last point, well two really, Fitzwilliam was a bit anoying at times, he interfered so much he almost ruined everything. And his sister just sort of disappeared, whatever happened to her?
Right that's it, I promise, no more rambling from me, well not today anyway.
Thanks ever so for sharing this and do keep writing, you're great!

Every time you spell college "collage" I smirk...it's obvious that a college course in writing would be helpful to you.

This story has elements that are good and interesting but the bad, though not much, is way too distracting.. the characters are too dramatic to the point of seeming bipolar, in trying to merge parts of an 18th century book you have mixed in characteristics that were acceptable 200 years ago but seem laughably insane in a modern setting. Darcy is obnoxiously stuck up, Elizabeth is so bipolar it's not even funny and Jane and Charlie are pretty pathetic. I tried but I can't get through the rest of the book, sorry :-(

This is a good start.

Good story.

And we're back in the 1950's. Maybe Joseph McCarthy is the man sharing a room with Elizabeth. "...her rank would not do for his." Seriously?

Okay I should have waited but Chapter 3 until the author turned this into a believable modern PRIDE AND PREJUDICE.

Whilst modern P&P are my favourite, this one is a muddle. We're it not for the use of 21st century musical groups and designers, one would think through the stilted behaviour and conversations that this taking place in the 1950s.

Chapter two does suffer from a lack of editting, correctly spelled words but wrong use. One would hope Darcy was thinking of the Bennett's second OLDEST daughter instead of the second youngest .

I don’t know if this is going to be good yet, cause I just started reading the first chapter, but Elizabeth Bennet singing “I’ll follow you into the dark” is something more… Now I would never listen to this song the same way. Thanks for giving me something more to relate with this beautiful love story!

"Will wad" should be "Will was".

"He tried a different tact." I think you meant 'tack' rather than 'tact'

Aww...

Funny chapter