This caused serious depression.

. . .bitter-sweet. With an aftertaste of honey. Nicely done. A lot darker than I expected out of Sato-chan (oh how the daggers are aimed) but still oddly fitting of him.

TT why...there better be a happy ending here...

Woah this is one heck of a story; so exciting and yet so tragic. I'm kinda sad its completed though, cos I really want to see some sort of change in their relationship! Nevertheless, this was quite the story, fulfilling in terms of emotions and story line!

it's a very sad story. i usually don't read stuff like this because it makes me sad but, i already read this to the end.

hoping for a happy ending, as i finished the first chapter, i went on to the second, no happy ending. I'm not flaming you, i think it was a very well written story It Just Needs A Happy Ending. if happy ending aren't your style, PLEASE don't write such depressing things. i think you could do well writing happier things.

p.s. THIS IS NOT A FLAME. I THINK YOU ARE A GREAT AUTHOR.

poor Niwa..

Wonderful truely amazing. I hope to see this continued. I like how you have Hiwatari and Hikari sepearted like that it's kind of neat and creative. I really like this story and hope to see it to the end. :3

I really like the rape scene and the teeny piece of hope at the end. Please keep making more!

Wowz! Write antoher, it rocked!

Lilia, the uke rapist.

...That was really twisted... Yet heart-tugging. ;-;

I love it!

so is that the end or there gonna be more chapters? and will he be normal agine, i mean hiwatari? and will niwa ever gonna to leave him for good?

Submissive- ah..well...I'm not much of a yaoi fan to begin with...but for some reason this couple is a favorite of mine. Probably one of the ONLY yaoi couples I can accept.

Nihilistic- one of the cutest...which you've destroyed very pleasurably. I must say. I've quite enjoyed these two chapters. It seems as though you know exactly what a rape victim feels like and the details are something else. I sat, drowning in the emotion of Niwa and the evilness of Hikari. Although he was just a tad bit ooc. But just a small bit. You've caught both characters very well and I'm highly impressed. You're an author/authress worth looking into. I'm sure your other stories -if you have any- are just as good.

Submissive- o.o yes...very impressive indeed. You are automatically one of my fav authors, and this story is a fav, and thus I am adding you to my Author Alert list )

Nihilistic- I'll be waiting to see what other pleasurable horrors you've created. Perhaps we can start e-mailing and discussing a story to make together. ) but for now...I hope you keep writing such delicious nightmares.

Sincerely,

- Submissive Nihilistic

o_O I took an apple and sat down at my beloved laptop. I saw 'Broken and Fallen'. I clicked as I bit into my apple, eating it slowly. And then I read lower, and lower... and lower... and lower.

My expression?

/ "OMG!"

THAT has to be the bestest thing in my entire life! XD I love this so much on how Satoshi turned out in the end! I believe that you did a good job! You should write more things like this, it makes me feel all giddy and good inside at the same time when I imagine it.

Thumbs up for you! *pats back*

whats up this story was nice you should make more chappies i would love that

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