Hi, HanaKirei...

Hmmmh, nice introduction to the world of fan fiction and nice first story. The birthday party was interesting, and I got a kick out of how well you portrayed Gourry's behavior...especially the eating. I believe it is canon for Lina to be that short-tempered and throw fireballs around for no good reason other than that she's ticked at somebody?

Nice hook to your upcoming second chapter...can't wait to see whom the "mysterious hooded figure" is. Is it a certain 999-year old mage who lives in the sewer? (Just kidding :-) :-) :-) )

Arrrrr...harrr...harrr...

Keep on writing and keep your Grimroires handy for research! ;-)

-Freddo

Hi, Hanachan!

Unlike what gutb says, I think it does have a hook (considering the hook itself is that it's a Slayers continuation). *hands Hanachan a walnut*

Now, when will you uplaod the next part? I know I've seen it already but I'm surprised it's not here yet.

On a side note - there are many reasons the egg could have hatched now that do not have to appear in this story. Consider that the Slayers universe is inherently filled with magick (Yes, I know more people spell it without the 'k' - personal preference). Consider also the logic between differentiations in the continuities of space and thyme - err, time. Consider that the egg probably fell into one of these loops of discontinuity (considering they appear in all anime, darn it) and reappeared a few minutes later Fi-chan's time and 50 years later, egg time.

Yolk, yolk, yolk.

*maniacal laughter resonates in the background*

~,o

Oh...write more it's a great start!

kawaii! continue, dammit! 182/187

Good story. Please continue.

~Helen~

Very good! Anyways...just ignore Gubby's advice completely: those parts of it that are any good you already have shown that you know. And get more written soon, please...

continue! hurry! now now now! more more more!

This is excellent, Hana-chan. I love the way you use humor and it fits in with the tv series nicely. I can't wait to see what happens with that walnut. I have a feeling it has something to do with a mysterious person... your fic really HOOKED me into wanting to read the next chapter!

Oooooh continue...this is coooool...heh heh...Gourry sliced the table in half...

Yes, I am pathetic and writing a review for my story. _; Ah well...if you do read it, please review and stuffs! _ Thankies!

VERY Kawaii story...please write the next chapter! (I hate cliff-hangers)

Good start. Is the nut going to be in the next chapter too? ll_ll

This is your first fanfic, so I'll be gentle. The first chapter should always contain a "hook", or something that grabs the reader's interest. Nothing interesting happens in this one. Also, the director notes for Try said that Val's egg won't hatch for another 50 years, but that's a forgivable oversight - it's not that important.