Eeeeh, I was sure Xander was Riddick's son... Then again, I am not against this particular bit of incest...

hmm the first thought i had while reading this was that Xander was Riddick's son but it seems that they like each other so i guess not. there is a couple spelling grammers here and there. i definitly like the story. of course my favorite part is the bashing of buffy . i wish the chapters were a bit longer though. i cant wait to see what happens next. please update soon. do you know any other sotries that has this crossovers? its hard to find any.

Spike? What's he doing there? Interesting story. I originally thought maybe Xander was his son but if they like each other like that then I guess not.

o is it spike? anyway great story, update soon!

Good story, great plot idea, but you're doing what you did in The One Eye'd Warrior. You've improved a lot, but you have the habit of not capitalizing the right things. The plot is interesting but I feel a bit confused. Riddick went there to find his son, yet he found Xander. There really isn't any plot development other than the bashing to Buffy, Willow, and Giles. Also you cut your chapters way too short. You get into one idea and then stop the chapter. Yes I'm complaining about the cliff hangers. Remember to space between the paragraphs it makes it quite hard to read them other wise. Also you bring in different stories for the plot without warning, limit how many series you are bringing into a series or it'll get chaotic! (trust me I've done this before with one of my deleted stories.)

Also, I feel that you don't describe things to the best that you could. It's like you rush through a scene to get somewhere else where you drag it out. Add detail to the surroundings, the actions of the characters, and as you do this advance with the plot.

I hope this helps you with future chapters! Update soon please!

Blackrosebunny

*growls* go XANDER and riddick! more specifically Xander. :D I think I like this chapter this most cause Xan is showing Buffy she ain't as big and bad as she thinks! YAY! good job on this chapter!

Okay I am loving this latest chapter, I've always wanted Buffy to get her ass kicked. Keep up the good work.

HELL YEA xan kick her ass teach her a lesson. this is getting so good i cant wait to read more hopefully soon and good to see you again.

oh i am so lovin this story! I am sorta confused at one part, isint Riddick supposed to find his son? but instead he found a mate...i love the interaction though! Update soon!

Hm, little too much mockery based on te whole "I'm special argument" that goes around in most fiction (Sasuke anyone?). Neh. COntinue to update, this chapter was fun, if a little short, and better written. Ja ne.

Great fic, your chapters are getting better as you go. You can definately see the progress your making. I enjoy reading your stories, they are definately unique. :) Keep it up and plz update again soon.

go Xander! yay! good job with these last two chapters and the whole fic!

Hm, slightly better chapter than the last, less abrupt. At times, your dialog and descriptions are brilliant, usually one or the other, but at others, are downright painfully bad. It often seems like you're putting emphasis on the scenes you love, but push beyond the ones you don't care about instead of embracing everything involved with your work. That, is not a good thing. Push forward with everything you do, and then you can do so much more. Continue to write, but also continue to edit, you need it. Update again soon, ja ne.

well here goes buffy and her I AM THE SLAYER, she really needs to pull her head out of her butt. this is so good. and i love how xanders eyes changed. oh i really hope he wipes the floor with her she really gets on my nerves.

o drool naked xander...love it. so does xander's eye's change color or do they go back to brown.