I effing bloody loved it! So hot! I am bloody dying!

Love it！

I enjoyed it.

That was amazing! I am definitely a huge fan of your writing, you are fantastic! This was so...really the only word to describe it was erotic. Yet it was so tasteful! I am so impressed! If you wrote a novel like this you would sell millions of copy's, I guarantee it!
Wonderful story! Great job! Keep up the amazing writing!

I like this one-shot, it really is amazing!

Good

So sweet!

Gosh I love it! :)

this was so smutty and just shows that love is worth taking risks!

that was a great story! it was brilliant! thanks for writing .

VERY well-written. I am thoroughly impressed! Clearly ,a thasaurus is your friend, because I honestly don't think I saw the same adjective twice! LOL!

Plot-wise, I couldn't REALLY see this happen. I think the beginning and middle were very realistic. Here is were you went off into the land of low possibilities:

"Lily wonders if she was too hard on him the other day. He annoys her, frustrates her and sometimes she wants nothing more than to lob something heavy at his head. But she can't deny his charm either."

Don't ge me wrong - this is extremely well-written and the emotions were plausible. However, I feel as her forward actions ould not have happened at that moment. Maybe that's just my personal preferance?

TYPO:

"'Lily!' Like a cannonball his voice calls to her and she turns, against all inhibitions. Never had she heard her name from his lips..."

Ah, but she HAS heard him say her name before:

"'Lily, wait up!' He yells through the long corridor, hearing it echo down the long walls. She knows it's him and pretends she doesn't notice but her newly changed posture indicates otherwise."

No biggie.

Overall, a very well done piece. Very real emotions. I look forward to seeing more works from you. Keep writing! You clearly have talent for it.

I don't know what your usual style is, but this one is spectacular. :)

incredibly writing. very believable. loved it

WOW... loved that story! I love this type of story... where Lily and James dance around eachother and then in the end, just give in and have their wicked way with each other! XD Well done! Excellently written!

I loved it. It was hot and sweet at the same time, something that's hard to achieve. Beutiful.

A typo I did notice was heels, but otherwise nothing.