This is amazing! Please do another chapter! Please!

That was really good :)

Oh, you end it there? Sigh, all good things must come to an end. This was very original, especially the setting. Very good with Jack's dialogue, Elizabeth's also. Her streams of consciousness always lose when it comes to her passion for Jack, lol.

Ah! That was a wonderful dose of Jack/Lizzie goodness. You had them both in character, spot on. And your descriptions were great. I got a chuckle out of Elizabeth's talking to herself, scolding herself for worrying about Jack. And the end... *sigh* Wonderful; especially this part:

“Lizzie,” his hand cupped her face tenderly, his thumb tracing her jaw line, making her quiver. Too close, this is too close, Elizabeth, her mind shouted until it was muffled by the beat of her heart in her ears. “There’s a lot you don’t know about me and as improbable as my legend may be, there is far too much truth to the real story than I wish to bestow upon you.” He ran his fingers through her tousled hair and sighed dejectedly.

Great, great job done!

Aw. That was both sweet and wonderful. I loved reading every word. You did an amazing job on this. Elizabeth and Jack were both in character, and the descriptions were amazing.

Wonderful!

'The flickering light that sliced through the swaying strands of hair and rounded beads cast slits of light upon his face that glowed in the pools of brown in his eyes.'

WOW. For some reason that really struck me as intense. It made it seem like you were really there or watching the whole thing happen-I have never felt that way before.

This was really, really...really good.

HoistTheColours

Baugh, you so need to write a second chapter; it's torture only having one chapter to read. D:

This was amazing,I truely loved it. Jack and Elizabeth are completely in character, something that seems to be hard to find lately. I loved how it took place in AWE: hell, this should be in the movie. Great work matey. :)

Ice

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Wow! One of the best I've read in a LONG time. Great job keeping them in character, too.

Great beginning. I quite like where it's headed. :D

THIS IS AMAZING! I deff think you should continue...PLEASE!

Oh and by the way, I found it quite interesting, I actually found your youtube site, if I am correct, it is gealuv. right? lOl. I just thought I would tell you, (if that is you,) and that I absolutely love your video, "Dum Da Di Doo!" lOl. Great work on that btw. :]

-haleyXsparrow-

Amazing! Please continue:)

WOW. Well written (spelling, grammar, and your words flow...) and beautifully executed. Nicely done.

The beginning was a little random, but it got better. ;)

Where's Will? I know you mentioned they were still engaged, and she was seeing him soon...

And what are Jack and Elizabeth doing sleeping in the room? *eyes widen*

Am I asking too many questions? I can't decide whether it would be better remaining by itself or with another chapter continuing the story.

Tigger101

Aw. So sweet! ...I...I'm so utterly speechless. Its so...so...so amazing! I don't know how you do it but everything just flowed...right down to the last word. I love it. I love it all. :]

Wow. Just wonderfully captivating! I love seeing a softer side to both of them, while keeping true to their characters. Nicely done :)