At first I thought Lovely and Byuty were super cute, and then just a little too naughty; then Rufio... I felt bad for Peter, but, I would've got over it... If not for Peter's last thoughts... That's too depressing; I'm crying right now! Dx I want an alternate happy ending or something! Stupid Rufio! Poor Peter... I can't believe that happened to him; god, why couldn't Peter have just stayed with Captain Hook, not gone back at all... T-T

Oh my... Peter no!

*cries* NO! D*mn that Rufio. lol i loved it, hun! great job! Next time u write a story space it out ok? Great job! Make more HookxPan fix! I might make one myself! I love this movie and Jeremy Sumpter(Peter Pan)!

OMGOSHNESS! thats so sad! Like Bitter sweet cause he still love James Hook, but so sad because it's Rufio!

Oh i have an idea! Hook can fight Rufio, winner gets Pan! ready? go!

*insert fight scene!*

Yeah Hook wins!

wow, sry, i ramble...

Anyway! Love your story! but the format makes it a little hard to read, if you wanted icould go through and paragraph it for you?

LamaPie

maybe you should divide it into paragraphs...