This is really bugging me as a music fan...
It's Tubthumping by Chumbawumba not "Knocked Down"

LoL I thought this was following a different story line o.O? You'll never probably get this but try to twist the plot how you like, you clearly have good writing skills...

He needs a job.

This Warren dude...don't like him. Plain and simple. Gwen's mom too, although at a lesser degree. I tend to dislike people with such low regards to humanity.

Peter must be very good at sewing to fix up his costume all the time.

I like the little outtakes of Stark and the Fantastic Four in the middle of the massacre. A little comedic relief is always welcome.

That was a cruel prank. I actually believed you! You shouldn't play with things like this though; situations like those are very real and you never know if a reader is related to it. Like me -_-

On another note, I can't believe the girl got the name wrong. You're not supposed to forget your savior's name.

I think Peter should help with the arrest, if the cops ever let up on him, considering the trouble they have with his webs.

I was expecting this but it still doesn't make it any easier. Although, I feel like you only covered the surface of how Peter felt knowing his uncle was just killed. It felt rushed. I'm not saying he would have taken the time to cry or anything but I think Peter would have expressed his anger better than just running away. A scream of denial maybe?

Anyway, great job.

Who the heck is this maniac? I feel out of the loop here.

That one blurb about Murray? Loved it. I mean, the man barely deserves any sympathy but it was very tactful of you to include his POV of the situation. This whole killing spree would have been dreadfully boring and monotone without it. You didn't depict what Adrian thought throughout the whole thing, although it's obvious with your narration, but Murray's thoughts made the whole thing a two-way mirror of the same situation.

Now, Peter is so going to regret this. I hate this part. Sure, Ben's death put Peter on the right track but the same could have been done if the man had been hospitalized in critical condition but survived. Guilt is subjective, I'm sure Peter would have beaten himself up just as much if Ben was hurt but not dead.

...He is evil. You think you know a person and they turn out to lead a double life as a deranged criminal. Well, Mr. Osborn isn't deranged...yet.

Peter had a grand time. I'm curious to know if that's what happened in the comics. Also, from where did you adopt the web shooting? I don't know whether that's from the comics of the movie.

Now this is getting really good.

I don't like Dr. Paxton much. He has such a dual view on animals. He can appreciate them but then he can perform countless experiments on them because humans rule the world. How egotistical. I'm sure there's a name for people who think humans are above all else.

Anyway, very good story. I like where this is all going. I just dread a few upcoming character deaths.

Nice Author's Note at the end there. It made me laugh xD

I haven't read the comics or anything, I go by the various animated series out there. It's refreshing to read at Spider-Man fic like this, one that starts from the beginning. I look forward to reading the rest.

Oh, I noticed a small typo when you were describing the bathroom. "The, sink was dingy and..." the comma after "the".

I just can't help but wonder though, are you still working on this story? I noticed it's been a long time since you've updated.

Great story, King. Keep on keepin on.

Good start, I like the way you describe things. I also loved the bit with Johnny Storm, that was clever :)

I'm going to guess that maybe English isn't your first language? It's just there are a few spelling mistakes but nothing major.

Enjoying it so far!

Hey, pally! Sorry it's taken so long...I was on an internet hiatus...don't ask.

The good:

-You may be complaining about how short it is, but DANG! Short just makes it easier to read your chappies in one sitting! I like it. (Okay, I'm on a wierd high right now.)

-"...Mistakes were made. Mostly me agreeing to work for this writer again." ...ROFLMAO. That was funny. I love you, Deadpool.

-I like Tombstone's portayal here. He's big, he's mean, he's scary, Awsome showing, chap.

The bad: Nothing!

Comments: Update soon! :D

WHAT TOOK YA SO LONG?

Okay! There are a couple things I REALLY should've told you about last time, espescially since you requested it, and I apologize. I have a PM waiting, just wait a couple of seconds after this review!

The Good: I love J.J. I don't know what it is, but I just love him. The part where Betty attempted an 'almost' flirt with Peter, then learned he was only sixteen...that was just GOLD! (I remember back in USM when Black-Cat found out Spidey was a kid...poor kid spent HOURS getting the vomit off his...er...crotch area. ;D) Anyways...DEADPOOL! If Spidey wasn't already my favorite Super from Marvel, it would be him, and this chapter clearly shows why! I love him! Finally, My friend, this chapter seems just right. Not too long, not too short, but just right. Kudos!

The Bad: Twice, you spelled 'Jonah' as 'Johan.' Once after Jonah yells "BLOOD PRESSURE BE-!" And again when Robbie says "JOHAN isn't normally like that, it's just that-"...

Comments: I'm not sure how the relationship between Otto and Curt could go. If you re-worked them to be both Physicists or Biologists, then it could go alright. Otherwise, how could two scientists from two TOTALLY different fields of experience work together harmoniously? Meh, I await your answer and your next update!