I'm in heaven.;-) ;-) ;-) ;-) ;-) ;-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-)

wonderful story!

5/5

Hey there Khaleda !

2nd story i read from ya, and second great time i had thanxxxx to ya ! So all my gratitude to ya for making my day with this short yet enjoyable story here ! NO matter the length of a fiction anyway, the main point is that it give both the author(ess) and reader a good time ! And it definitely is the case !

I especially like Raven and Jinx as characters, especially dig their pairing, and especially enjoy the emoticlones, so this plot here had EVERYTHING to draw my interest and please me. And indeed, what a pleasant read it was ! I notably appreciated your choosing Knowledge, which is my fav' emotion of all, so thanxxxx also for that judicious choice of yours ! I did regret that there weren't 2 or 3 more emoticlones involved here, like Rage or Brave, or of course LOve (Desire in your plot), or why not crazy Happy. Two only wasn't much, but at least there was my fav' among them, so i guess that is the main point.

I particularly loved the tense and then loving / sweet moments between both sorceresses, at the end, and how you very accurately depicted their emotions, and their physical manifestation (ah, the toes curling in the boots, the looking at the feet, the biting one's lip, the warm breath of Jinx very close... all this was very well observed and detailed, and gave so much intensity and pertinence to your description of a love moment. Bravo, really !

I also liked how pretty cryptic Knowledge could be, avoiding straightforward answers and sometimes limitating her replies to a mere gesture (touching her head twice wz her finger, for instance). I actually love any mysterious / enigmatic material in stories, and all those strange moments in which a reader's landmarks are blurred and brings him/her into unfamiliar yet very interesting territory.

The only lukewarm point to me is Jinx's realization that she liked Raven. Perhaps it's just me nitpicking, but it seemed to happen... how to put it... maybe a tad fast and without preliminary clues. Like, for instance, Jinx pondering her feelings for Raven, or some hint about the evolution of these feelings in the first part, when / before Jinx enters Raven's room. She realizes it on the spot, pretty quickly, when she's in the presence of Knowledge, but i would have appreciated some evolution during the plot, like Jinx sensing that her feelings for Raven have changed or perhaps her regretting that Raven isn't in the tower for her to contemplate her and talk to her... like she certainly wants to, more or less unconsciously. But as i said, that's only my perpective, and perhaps i'm just somewhat quibbling with that point, i dunno... ;)

Anyway, a maddive thanxxxx to ya for this delicious one-shot here, which i appreciated as due, and which ends up in my fav's basket as well (after VIOLENTLY HAPPY). Great job, my dear ! And it naturally is NOT the time to turn back and give up on ya, so be sure i'll be on your next story this very afternoon, therefore expect a review next week.

Kudos again for your hard work, and gratîtude renewed for all your sTTories ! Am sure i'll luv 'em all !

A fine day to ya, who has just made mine ! :D

_ Léo _

:)(: Absolutely fantastic! I love these two together. I kind of wanted Jinx to run in to the two emotions Knowledge said not to.

Could you please please please make this a multi chapter fic? It would be so good!

This was sappy in all the right ways, and I was, kinda, very smugly smiling while reading that last part. Not sure why, as I didn't write it (nor contribute), but maybe it was just because I really liked it and you wrote it very well? ;)

Thanks for this. It helped finish a wonderful day.

Great story, real awesome work.

I think you should really make this more than a one-shot. It has potintial.

This is far to good to be a one shot, u should continue it, it's freaking awesome

u know you could do something like how they ended the episode but instead of anger it's desire

Sweet. :)

like it

Oh, yeah. That's what I'm talkin' about. Sugar and spice and everything ... wicked.

Love the Raven/Jinx pairing, and you do a FANTASTIC job with the interaction.

great story, its a pity its just a one-shot though it could have been continued throughout the series

Why?