O.O Whoa. I...that's so sad...who...?

Very well written, and a very original story.
Please tell me your going to write a sequel to this! You ended it with such an intriguing cliff hanger; this can't be the end of the story right?

My reaction throughout the story:
:o :O :D XD X,D :,) ...? ...? ...! 8O ;_; T_T
If that's not sufficient enough, let's just say my heart swelled and almost burst from joy, and by the end, I was crying so hard I was sure I was having a seizure... Definitely one of the best, if not the best Royai I've ever read, and I don't think I've ever read a story that broke my heart so hard :(

I'm... I'm floored :C
I mean, I perfectly know what was coming and I wholly agree that marriage between Roy and Riza would have ended like this - at least, at the stage the manga was in when you wrote this fic -, but it's still agonizing to read, when put into such beautiful words and storytelling as yours. This goes straight to favourites and it's going to be first choice whenever I feel like a good re-read - and masochistic enough to want to have my tears jerked ;_;
BTW, I'm going through all your FMA fics and it's likely that I'll fav more of them. xP
Amazing job!
Kirjava

Woah...that was prettttty unexpected...interesting though, that's for sure. kinda wish there was Maes's reaction or something. But I liked it! hahah. nice work

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I don't have much to say. I'm a bit tired right now. But this was very well written, concise, and interesting to read. Excellent work.

This was a brilliant! It was beautifully written and I honestly didn't see the murder coming and it made me tear up! I hope Maes straightened out what happened and brought the guy to justice.

Well done :D

Oh gosh. That was horrible. Not the story, it was great! But the ending. It was so sad. ._. great job, btw.

...why?

Was the murderer an existing Character in Fullmetal?

I want to try and work it out... the homunculi?

Is there going to be a sequel to put me out of my misery...?

Too many questions!

You write very well, it was painful to read... but only painful because of what it was telling me...

OMG that was sad! It mad me cry...but I don't get it. What does this have to do with Arakawa having her reasons? Hurry to get to the top? Huh? Sorry, I'm a little slow right now.

Oh my god. That was horrific! I expected something like that to happen but it was all happy and then it just happened... Very interesting though! I really like this story. Don't get me wrong, but wow- that was just...ah... very vivid.

Aw this chapter made me smile as much as Roy, Riza and Maes put together, if it is possible to smile more than they! This was beautifully written, and the best wedding scence I've read!

Heh. "The images he usually had to yield (should maybe be wield?) like weapons in order to get anyone to look at them were this time invited with open arms". It's a dream come true for our favourite amateur photographer, isn't it?

I love your office banter: very realistic, absolutely hilarious. Well done! It's often hard to write "crowd" dialogue, but you've executed.

Roy's happy, rambling thoughts are just right, too. Such a perfect fit. The squeaky bed made me smile. Is there ever a couple on a well-deserved and long-overdue honeymoon who DOESN'T wind up with a squeaky bed? Good old Riza, making him take action. :-D

Oh, Morgoth. Here it is. I knew, I KNEW there was another shoe...

Words fail me, and that's not usually a position in which I find myself. Let me try to communicate the awful, gut-wrenching horror of the last few paragraphs. Roy's agony is so subtly and effectively communicated. Your phrasing is simple and straightforward, and absolutely... absolutely devastating.

The last segment is the most terrible of all. The cool, impersonal formality of the police report is hugely effective. We are presented simply with the facts-and the absurd inference of the local plod-and left to work out the rest for ourselves. Riza's murderer, Roy's final moments, and above all Maes Hughes' reaction on Monday when he picks up this "routine" document.

I'm in awe. Brilliantly, brilliantly written. A stern reminder to all of us on board the Good Ship Royai that Love Story #5 can never be rushed... or it turns, as this one did, into Love Story #6.

A work of genius. Brava.

*Sigh*

This is just gorgeous: it's exactly the way their wedding SHOULD have been like. I say "should have been", of course, because it can't be now, Maes being dead. Still, it's lovely and the bittersweet might-have-been-ness does my heart good. It's so full of gorgeous imagery, I'm not sure where to start. Maybe with the first paragraph? Simple, elegant descriptions drawing us instantly into the scene. You've captured Roy and Riza like a photograph, and it's a photograph I would covet!

I love "They looked so peaceful. So comfortable in knowing that they would finally be together". And "The words that they had been so sure were coming eventually, but had always seemed around the corner, just out of sight." These lines, especially, communicate the years of patience and self-control that finally culminate in this moment. Of course, of the seven love stories, number 5 (the waiting and hoping one) is my favourite, so I confess I'm biased. Still, I must reiterate; gorgeous, simply gorgeous.

Maes's speech is perfect: you've got his character right down, and I could see the whole thing playing out in my mind. It's a beautiful fantasy, and a clear picture of how it might have been had they jumped the gun and gone ahead with marriage prematurely.

Of course, it would have been prematurely, since the game hasn't been fought yet. You can't reap the rewards until the enemy is vanquished. No Tinuviel without a Silmaril (love story #5, remember?) Because I know you're not a blind optimist and because of the title, I'm guessing there's another shoe here.

On to Chapter 2. My heart palpitates with dread.

Beautiful and heartstopping. Everything in my chest clenched by the time I read the ending. This was masterfully done.