Aw this was both strange and beautiful. I think it came into its own especially towards the end. Sometimes the style with the shifts in voice and tense made it a little confusing and there were errors like that she lent on her parents after James left, but they had already died and that was quite siginficant in Thr story! And I was confused with the conversation about lily walking away when it was James who did. But despite those things I think it developed really well and felt so touching and real and had it's own unique tone and feeling. I especially liked the way your portrayed Lily's thoughts and her realisation that she didn't imagine being there in the future an knowing what Harry would be like.

You most certainly do not suck at dialogue. This is fantastic, I swear!

aww that was so sweet and sad! it was just beautiful! loved everything about it! thanks for writing! .

Tears just started falling right after I read Chapter 9 and the ending was so perfect... too perfect, in fact. This definitely made my favorite J/L fanfictions list. Your words are so beautiful, your writing is perfect, this fanfiction is too amazing for words. I'd be on the lookout for more of your wonderful stories. You've made me fall in love with James and Lily even more.

"Can I just say this?" he asks. "I want to be there for it.I want to be there when you cry because you're turning thirty and I want to be the one to tell you that I've never seen you look more beautiful. I want to be there in fifty years and feel your wrinkling and soft hand holding me tight. I want to look at you, fifty years from now, and show you that I have never loved you more. I want to grow old with you."

She looks at him, in slight awe, before she is able to speak.

"See James," she says as a slight tear falls down her cheek. "now that is a proposal."

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You write beautifully. 3

I love your fics. You are an excellent writer. This was a good story. One question, I forgot the chapter but wjhen Lily is reflecting on her two years without James she says she leaned on her parents fir support. Are they not dead? Other than that, I loved it.

It was so good, but just that very last sentence in chapter 9... I had shivers. It was a great story.

Great story. I really enjoyed reading it. I especially loved how we flashes forward to Harry and Ginny's lives and saw them together at the end. Please keep writing!

Oh, I hate you.

This story was beautiful and it made me cry!

Oh my god that was amazing. I was crying, and I seriously never, ever, ever cry. You are such a good writer, and I love the way you wrote it. I love Harry and Ginny at the end and James & Lily al the way through. That was so good! haha ill stop ranting, but THANK YOU for writing that :)

You are AMAZING!

You. Go write amazing romance novels and make millions of lonely single women happy!

Dialogue is very natural and the jokes are not forced. Excellent use of words and tone and-and-and...

Fantabulous. 3

Kaffy

oh that was written beautifully!

Aw... that was sad. And really sweet. I just read the last 3 chapters, so that is for all of them. Great story. I'm sad that it's over.

“Nothing…nothing. It’s just… everything is about to change, isn’t it?” this line reminded me of Hermione really really well...

Bloody hell, I'm actually crying. I'm honestly sad. This was really good. I enjoyed it immensely.